|Reviews for Training Day|
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/25/2013
i loved it
| I31011 chapter 1 . 8/5/2010
I absolutely loved this!
| K9 the First chapter 1 . 7/11/2009
Well that's fun! _
And yes, I enjoyed ROTF too. I say that Movie Jetfire is the Iroh of Transformers. _
| Joran Antilles chapter 1 . 7/11/2009
This may be "Just an excercise in action sequencing" but it's a good deal better than those of most authors.
I know that's not necessarily a compliment but still.
I think you should consider attempting to make your sentences more vivid. For example: "Zuko spun around with his arm out, sending an arc of fire, almost liquid in state" could be better changed to something like "Zuko spun around with his arm out, and suddenly an arc of liquid flame erupted forth." A sentence like this uses stronger verbs and a more active voice making the fight sound more interesting. Just a thought.
The choreography was excellent, though. Good Job.