|Reviews for Fate's Gambit|
| misuky7 chapter 9 . 23h ago
This was a brilliant story. I may have said this before but I adore your work and am thoroughly addicted to it. I cannot wait to read the sequel to this. :3
| jon08 chapter 9 . 2/25
absolutely loved this. Previously read A different Halloween, and Harry Crow, A Kiss Can Save the World, and Can't Have it both ways. All Stories by you, and on an off chance looked at your profile page and noticed lots of stories of yours I hadn't read, read this and again loved it. Going on to FG2 next. I have corrected an error in judgement on my part and added you to my favourite authors list, Keep up the good work.
PS. On a personal note loved seeing my name in print, even if it wasn't me, you were talking about...
| old guy chapter 9 . 2/22
I didn't realize this was the last chapter at the time. Glad there is an FG2. I hated to see the men die, but am very glad their mothers made it. Liked the wrap up. Wonder how long before Rita and Peter have an accident. This was very good. Goes into the saved stack.
| old guy chapter 9 . 2/22
when you scripted fate last chapter I knew there was gonna be a lot of action this chapter. And I've only gotten as far as Lucius. Couldn't happen to a nicer guy. I wondered about the Grangers and now I see. I believe every bit of how you wrote that one. I am very sorry you scripted it this way as I had hopes on them, but it does set up the Golden Trio very nicely. Can't wait to see what is further in just in this chapter. Dumbledore needs to be hung by the neck until he is dead, dead, dead, and then his body left there on display for a week. Gladd they got Pettigrew btw.
| smargden chapter 1 . 2/20
Yes - Re-read 19-20 feb 2015- And still cry in some parts as i re-reading it.
And itch - I see its reposted, and I do have 'first edition, as I nead to download
and 're-format' to read, and doing that I same it in my putor. It's mast 4 Gb
storys in it - and it's good to have as sometimes I do remember parts of a story
I like to revisit - and I can search for it.
Thank You Robs for your good storys
| NabikiB chapter 8 . 2/15
Should remind you that Dudley is only a couple of months older than Harry. This means he's also a nine year old. That means he's young enough to be re-trainable. Good job...NOT.
| clipsterman chapter 9 . 2/13
My views on this chapter specifically: Well that went south reaaaaaaaally fast.
My views on the fanfic as a whole:
I can honestly say that I really enjoyed this fanfic. The premise was really interesting and I enjoyed the way it evolved (probably in part because I have a soft spot for lonely children finding happiness). I was a little sad that Dumbledore had to be evil, but I get that it was kind of nescessary for the plot to work.
I only have three other things to note, all of which is directed at the author. The first is an advice in terms of writing: Please use the period key more often. A lot of the dialogue lost some of it's impact due to the fact that it sounded like an afterthought due to sentence construction. The second is also about the writing, but more in terms of the characters. The text is suffering a bit from All Writers Are Adults (read more on tvtropes) and some of the childrens dialogue when they reassure each other, feels kinda like the understanding is forced in rather than coming naturally.
The last note is not feedback or critique, but rather a somewhat personal message (and I deeply apologize if it is too personal). As a guy who likes literature (and tvtropes) I find that when a fanfic is less like normal literature and more like... I'm not sure how to explain it other than happiness-porn if you get my meaning. Anyway, when a fanfic is like that it usually contains some kind of Author Appeal (another tvtropes reference, this is the last one, I swear). My conclusion after reading the fanfic is that it is made with the intent of making up for Harry's abuse at the Dursleys (which is why the abuse was so detailed, and why Dumbledore became evil so that he could be a villain for putting Harry with the Dursleys). This made me worried that the author might have suffered from hcild abuse themselves. I just want to let them know that if it is true (which I really hope it isn't) then I am truly sorry on their behalf, and honestly wish them the best from this point.
Keep up the good work, I would be delighted to see a sequel.
| Deathmvp chapter 9 . 2/1
Great work on this short story. I am glad there is a part 2 as it would have sucked if there was none. For the record I would make that trade for my kids life.
| juan chapter 7 . 1/31
good thing in my story I would let tom's favorite girl lucy aka lucius go unpunish and the plot against sirus will be known before hollween which will be the end of crouch sr and his bastard son
| Cezhran chapter 9 . 1/29
I loved this story from start to end.. And I would hate myself if I didn't return for the next part. To me, this start of Harry Potters life is better than the book version. Because after having read a few fanfics.. I realized how much exactly I despised Albus Dumbledore.
This story is well-written, and could rival a lot other stories. Even the books themselves.
A different reason I love this beautiful piece of art. Is that I prefer Harry and Hermione together. To me that seems right.
Good luck with any more stories.
May the stars watch over you, and guide you.
The best regards.
Christian Adelbo aka Cezhran
| Steve-Arkarian chapter 9 . 1/23
Awesome awesome awesome! I can't wait to start reading the next one!
| Saissa chapter 9 . 1/1
Excellent Excellent Story!
Very well done.
Off to read the sequel now!
| liz.barden chapter 9 . 12/22/2014
Really good story!
| BlazeStryker chapter 1 . 12/4/2014
Dudley spilled the beans willingly because he was inside the house. Niiiiice.
| dragoncop chapter 9 . 10/31/2014
Don't know if you still read these but this is the forth time I've read fates Gambit and will most likely read it again. After I finish the Trio I will be going to your new piece.
THANKS FOR YOUR WORLD OF H.P.