Reviews for Fate's Gambit
old guy chapter 9 . 2/22
when you scripted fate last chapter I knew there was gonna be a lot of action this chapter. And I've only gotten as far as Lucius. Couldn't happen to a nicer guy. I wondered about the Grangers and now I see. I believe every bit of how you wrote that one. I am very sorry you scripted it this way as I had hopes on them, but it does set up the Golden Trio very nicely. Can't wait to see what is further in just in this chapter. Dumbledore needs to be hung by the neck until he is dead, dead, dead, and then his body left there on display for a week. Gladd they got Pettigrew btw.
smargden chapter 1 . 2/20
Yes - Re-read 19-20 feb 2015- And still cry in some parts as i re-reading it.
And itch - I see its reposted, and I do have 'first edition, as I nead to download
and 're-format' to read, and doing that I same it in my putor. It's mast 4 Gb
storys in it - and it's good to have as sometimes I do remember parts of a story
I like to revisit - and I can search for it.
Thank You Robs for your good storys
/Smargden
NabikiB chapter 8 . 2/15
Should remind you that Dudley is only a couple of months older than Harry. This means he's also a nine year old. That means he's young enough to be re-trainable. Good job...NOT.
clipsterman chapter 9 . 2/13
My views on this chapter specifically: Well that went south reaaaaaaaally fast.

My views on the fanfic as a whole:
I can honestly say that I really enjoyed this fanfic. The premise was really interesting and I enjoyed the way it evolved (probably in part because I have a soft spot for lonely children finding happiness). I was a little sad that Dumbledore had to be evil, but I get that it was kind of nescessary for the plot to work.

I only have three other things to note, all of which is directed at the author. The first is an advice in terms of writing: Please use the period key more often. A lot of the dialogue lost some of it's impact due to the fact that it sounded like an afterthought due to sentence construction. The second is also about the writing, but more in terms of the characters. The text is suffering a bit from All Writers Are Adults (read more on tvtropes) and some of the childrens dialogue when they reassure each other, feels kinda like the understanding is forced in rather than coming naturally.

The last note is not feedback or critique, but rather a somewhat personal message (and I deeply apologize if it is too personal). As a guy who likes literature (and tvtropes) I find that when a fanfic is less like normal literature and more like... I'm not sure how to explain it other than happiness-porn if you get my meaning. Anyway, when a fanfic is like that it usually contains some kind of Author Appeal (another tvtropes reference, this is the last one, I swear). My conclusion after reading the fanfic is that it is made with the intent of making up for Harry's abuse at the Dursleys (which is why the abuse was so detailed, and why Dumbledore became evil so that he could be a villain for putting Harry with the Dursleys). This made me worried that the author might have suffered from hcild abuse themselves. I just want to let them know that if it is true (which I really hope it isn't) then I am truly sorry on their behalf, and honestly wish them the best from this point.

Keep up the good work, I would be delighted to see a sequel.
Deathmvp chapter 9 . 2/1
Great work on this short story. I am glad there is a part 2 as it would have sucked if there was none. For the record I would make that trade for my kids life.
juan chapter 7 . 1/31
good thing in my story I would let tom's favorite girl lucy aka lucius go unpunish and the plot against sirus will be known before hollween which will be the end of crouch sr and his bastard son
Cezhran chapter 9 . 1/29
I loved this story from start to end.. And I would hate myself if I didn't return for the next part. To me, this start of Harry Potters life is better than the book version. Because after having read a few fanfics.. I realized how much exactly I despised Albus Dumbledore.

This story is well-written, and could rival a lot other stories. Even the books themselves.

A different reason I love this beautiful piece of art. Is that I prefer Harry and Hermione together. To me that seems right.

Good luck with any more stories.

May the stars watch over you, and guide you.

The best regards.

Christian Adelbo aka Cezhran
Steve-Arkarian chapter 9 . 1/23
Awesome awesome awesome! I can't wait to start reading the next one!
Saissa chapter 9 . 1/1
Excellent Excellent Story!
Very well done.
Off to read the sequel now!
brightflare chapter 9 . 12/22/2014
Really good story!
BlazeStryker chapter 1 . 12/4/2014
Dudley spilled the beans willingly because he was inside the house. Niiiiice.
dragoncop chapter 9 . 10/31/2014
Don't know if you still read these but this is the forth time I've read fates Gambit and will most likely read it again. After I finish the Trio I will be going to your new piece.
THANKS FOR YOUR WORLD OF H.P.
N Flamel chapter 9 . 10/24/2014
Robert, While this story was short, it packed an incredible wallop. I like how you had Fate scheming in the background, Hedwig the White Phoenix pulling off one miracle after another, Augusta and Amelia showing Wizards the proper to run a government, and finally Rita Skeeter, of all people, becoming the spokesperson for doing what's right, not easy.

Your Dumbledore is despicable and what he attempted to do to Maia is beyond contempt, with his ability to justify anything he does as being for the greater good. I'll be very interested to see how every one of these fascinating characters develop, but I'm especially interested in how far you take DD.

It's been fun reading this early work. Next in line is FG2. Thanks for all your hard work. - Nic
N Flamel chapter 6 . 10/24/2014
Robert, I saw mostly clearly in this chapter the philosophies that made Harry Crow one of the most popular fics in HP fan fiction. The bad guys were found and brought to justice, the wrongly imprisoned Sirius was exonerated and reimbursed for his time in Azkaban, the Goblins, and Ragnok specifically, did everything they could to ensure justice was served, and Augusta Longbottom ran the hearings with complete neutrality, moving the court to a unamimous finding on the Sirius matter, and previously having to do with the liberties taken with Lily and James Potter's will that lead to the arrest of Dumbledore. Along with the adults finally doing the right thing, we also saw Harry, Hermione and Luna bonding with each other with no prejudiced feelings at all, while all this is being watched over by the extremely rare White Phoenix.

Wow! You don't do things by half, do you? Anyhow, the themes that reached their fruition in your masterwork are seen here as old friends in this captivating story. Thanks, Nic
N Flamel chapter 5 . 10/24/2014
Robert, between Harry Crow and this story, I'd say you don't like Dumbledore very much. I have to say I'm in that camp, where you can construct overwhelming evidence of his law breaking and mismanagement of the Potter heir just from canon material. Of course, many fan fic authors have taken it further.

In this overall excellent and highly emotional chapter, I especially liked the casual way Dumbles wiped out all of his mail, based on him seeing the Howlers. Of course, he is now just beginning to see what a huge mistake tate was, since he missed the will opening session, Gringotts barring him based on his theft from the Potter accounts, and now being attacked and arrested in Diagon Alley. Of course, Albus' habit of missing the fine points in most situations is represented quite well in these scenes. - Nic
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