Reviews for Sister of Mercy
Guest chapter 1 . 2/11
great short story
JenniferAnn0124 chapter 1 . 8/25/2012
Great story! I really enjoyed it :)
12kirby12 chapter 1 . 8/4/2009
I like this story so far. The ending was sweet and well-written, I liked it.


DeathPaladin chapter 1 . 7/19/2009
Yay! Firestar!
Shadow Hand Zealot chapter 1 . 7/15/2009
I went into this story expecting it to be another OC story where the OC is not very likable, relatable, or even interesting.

That was my expectation.

I'm happy to say that I'm intrigued by this story and look forward to seeing where it goes. Your OC has the touch of humanity that so many lack and an air of authenticity. Both traits that tend to be lacking in many OCs. I like how she is trying to connect with Laura.

As for the current story, I like it and believe it deserves some more attention. If you're open to suggestions on how to have that happen let me know.

If there is one thing I would suggest, be careful with how you use the long dialogue sequences. If long monologues are a character trait then that is acceptable, as it seems with Angelica. For other characters though definitely be careful with it though. That's just me though.

All in all, a decent start, I'm looking forward to more. Keep up the good work.

DidGyre chapter 1 . 7/13/2009
That was cool.
FireBornInsanity chapter 1 . 7/13/2009