|Reviews for Kissing Strangers|
| Guest chapter 3 . 5/12/2015
The story goes a little fast. Try to slow down a bit. All of a sudden they're kissing and then *BAM* they're engaged. That's a little fast paced. Another thing is your authors notes. You might want to put those things down at the bottom of the story. If you put it in the fanfic, it disrupts the flow and takes you out of the story. Other than those points, I think you've got a really good story there. Keep up the good work!
| Guest chapter 3 . 2/15/2015
Lol maybe more of this
| Lazy Gaga chapter 3 . 8/20/2011
i'm kinda interested! update soon! :D
| Nature chapter 3 . 8/14/2011
dont fill bad there are so many more dreams with sasunaru goodness in them 3
| keiLuvsme chapter 3 . 5/1/2011
i hope you can add more tnx
| 10tailedokami16x chapter 3 . 4/13/2011
you are one fucked up chick aren't you and i like it
| 10tailedokami16x chapter 1 . 4/13/2011
i like it
| magicjewel chapter 3 . 8/24/2010
up! data girl!
| Hidden-Tresure chapter 3 . 7/21/2010
I had to read it all again to get the story but the uss was funny!
| S. Wright chapter 3 . 7/21/2010
You readers don't care about your personal feeling regarding character. You don't like and you dislike Sakura, fine, but why is that in your story?
You story reads like a hundred other stories on this site and in this fandom. You come off like read the manga, your characters are not developed, and what plot you do is a mismash of two or three other plots but with same ending that can be found in those other stories that yours is copy of. This is not flame, I don't flame other writers because it serves no purpose only to upset you. Don't look at this as a flame, see it as this. I read all three of chapters in five minutes and the first thing came to my was a story that on my Favorites List about Naruto in highschool being harrassed by Sasuke, with Itachi chasing Kyuubi. You have an semi-interesting idea, but the way you are trying to develope it shows lack attention to your story. You are developing your characters, you throwing out stereotypes based off of other stories that have little to do with characters in the manga/anime series. Look at Sasuke, the one you want to write and see who he is in your head. Do the same each of the characters, get a feel for them, know how they are build from there. Study your favorite authors (not Twilight lady because she's worst than half of the hacks on this site,)and pay attention to the way their characters come alive for you. Understand your source material, to draw insipration from there. Also try not to overcrowd your secondary character. Kiba is the biggest pitfall in the fandom. In the manga, he rarely there, and when is shown, he is a whiney brat. Naruto has mentally outgrown. Neji, he is not on the same level as Naruto and Sakura has basically moved into the shadows of the memory of team seven. Naruto is very strong character in manga but you need to discover this for yourself. There other things you should look and re-evalute your work. Read Jelp, Darkalbino, Master of Rebels, Micheleirene, and troll through favorites list to see who they are reading and study them. Just don't continue to rehash a story that been written a hundred times already.
Good luck with your writing.
| KyouyaxCloud chapter 3 . 7/21/2010
| Lilbakasaru chapter 3 . 7/21/2010
already making enemies
| AspergianStoryteller chapter 3 . 7/20/2010
Okay, you don't like Sakura. I would recomend not to go overboard with expressing that as it can look unprofessional. If she's going to be an antagonist try not make it super obvious. Her actons will show that enough.
| afallenheart chapter 2 . 6/4/2010
Please update as soon as possible! PLEASE!
| fullmoonwolf950 chapter 1 . 5/2/2010
its kyubi i just know it!