|Reviews for Final Revenge|
| The Girl from Shangri-La chapter 1 . 7/17/2009
I thought that this was a very interesting concept, and you write Thor very well. But the constant use of It/He, Its/His, etc., irritated the hell out of me and distracted from the story a great deal.
Maybe you should have gone with something like The Entity and interchanged the term with It every now and then. Or something more concrete. It's particularly confusing in the dialogue, because there's no way to actually *say* It/He in a natural sort of way.
Other than that, I really liked it! Keep up the good work!