Reviews for The Comedy Fox |
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![]() ![]() ![]() ...Why the hell is everything aside from the dialogue is in italacs?! Why can't you make all of them non-italacs and then only use it when the character is thinking? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I thought of some nicknames for Kotetsu and Izume. They are Gate and Key. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great Job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cool story and an interesting idea. I'm looking forward to reading more. Is the 'he' the Raikage referring to Jiraiya? How are they going to find Jiraiya? |
![]() ![]() Twitch...twitch...twitch...eyeeeettwitch. C-cliff h-han-ger! Twitch...*giggles*...eyeee-t-twitch...*whimpers*no-o not-t a-a c-cli-ff-ff han-ger-er. No-o! *sobs* Must read more! MUST READ MOOOOORRREEE! YOSH, THE FLAMES OF YOUTH BURN BRIGHTLY IN THIS FANFICTION, AND SUCH YOUTHFUL FLAMES SHOULDN'T BURN OUT! YOSH! *Does good guy pose* |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story, dattbayo! It's so cool! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Looking forward to more. :) the Tora hunt had me in stitches. :P |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey just wanted to fix my earlier statement your grammar in the the beginning chapters needs work. The later ones are pretty much fine . Seeya |
![]() ![]() ![]() Something I want to bring to your notice that while not big issue is that there are small holes in your grammar. Otherwise good job |
![]() ![]() ![]() awww poor little naruto he has to deal with little kids hahahaha |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love greetings I hope history continue reading that me singing and I stayed in know who is bitten by |
![]() ![]() ![]() *Llama Darky glomp* :D you're alive! i was just getting ready to PM you two and make sure you both were ok and were only buried in college and not say.. hit by a car ;) Anyway i would have reveiwed earlier but i thought i already had and just now i was reading a reccomendation list for naruto fics and thought to myself " hmm.. wonder when Comedy Fox'll be updated..?" then i had a moment where i was like "... wait.. i did review that riight?... CRAP!" and now here i am . Anyway about the chapter; I did enjoy it a lot as always and found the story about Naruto learning Anbu interesting and slghtly funny but i feel like the story is loosing some of it's original.. flare.. in the beginning we saw quite a few social interactions and really got to know Comedy Fox the character however in these past 2 chapters it's been a little like a really good filler that you know is important to the story but at the same time you want to hurry up so you can go back to the main story. :) (maybe cut back on flashbacks for a chapter or two then come back to it?) The first "Mask Beginnings Act " was in my opinion definately the best partially just because it kept a 'storytelling' feel to the Naruto which helped me as a reader to remember the previous chapters and put all of it into context. This is all just my opinion of course but i hope it''s helpful to you in some way :) Lastly i hope to hear from you soon and i really hope the hands stop hurting you Macho Llamas :( Also hopoe the school work is going well and Happy belated Thanksgiving :D! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good story. However the nicknames don't work. It's fine to have 1 or 2 but the amount in this story is excessive. |
![]() ![]() O_O Now I'm all embarassed. . . you thought Dominoes was good? Not that I don't appreciate your review, because I reallyyy do! See, I wrote it awhile ago... I believe I was 12. But, because I'm not that funny, and school-work is such a large burden, I haven't finished it. I'm 13 now... so, it's probably a little under a year old! -laughs nervously- Um, anyway, I'm really glad you liked the 1st chapter, but trust me- Once Mystee takes over, you'll like it A LOT more. (It was such a slow start!) But, I'm very honored because -from what I've read, this being the only story so far- you write so well! :) |