Reviews for The Blacks
twlightbella chapter 31 . 4h
Aww their engaged
twlightbella chapter 29 . 4h
twlightbella chapter 26 . 4h
Bella is pregnant
edwardandbella4eva chapter 32 . 4/28
I tried reading this all the way through... I really did, I just have issues with your grammar, spelling, and inconsistancies. I understand that you are not from the US, but if you are going to write a story that takes place in the US, you should probably have your characters speak differently and buy products that Americans know. The story moves along too quickly, and has a childlike reading structure. This story could be really good if you put more work into it. Also, when characters tell you don't need to use all capitals, and people don't yell that much. Another thing that you could do to improve your writing is to not reiterate what you've already said in another POV, unless it is absolutely necessary for the reader's comprehension. All together, you have a pretty good story line, it just needs more filler and a higher quality writing style.
Noemie.mikaeslon54 chapter 18 . 3/12
I believed that Carlisle was her doctor as you wrote it in the first one chapters when she banged the head and when she has of to go to the hospital
twlightbella chapter 42 . 11/10/2015
Bellas in labor
twlightbella chapter 39 . 11/10/2015
Destineyofme chapter 41 . 10/20/2015
please sett the sorry in complette
B4bidden.Products chapter 42 . 10/3/2015
Just so u know u made a mistake in the story at the start Bella new Carlisle Cullen when she had her accident due to Jake as she said he was her doctor. Then later on u said the Cullen's are back in town and then she meets Carlisle for the 1st time.
Destineyofme chapter 42 . 5/9/2015
Love the story please update it soon
Guest chapter 26 . 2/14/2015
Hum... Did I miss something or she has her period while pregnant?
Tori chapter 42 . 11/21/2014
Where's the rest
darkenedmoon101 chapter 41 . 9/20/2014
No it wasn't an extremely long chapter your chapters are just so short that that feels like that chapter was short to me so it wasn't an extreamly long chapter
darkenedmoon101 chapter 19 . 9/20/2014
Earlier on in the book when Bella got hurt from Jacobs fails smoothie you said that Carlisle was her doctor and now you are saying that they are only just meeting
Like WTF
Please respond so you can clean up the mess of all of your confusion in my head
The Dancing Huntress chapter 7 . 9/5/2014
I would like to say that people don't really scream that much
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