Reviews for That Blonde Boy
Blah-Blah-Amazing chapter 1 . 2/4/2013
Loved it! :D After seeing the movie Cormac became my ultimate fav! :)
Guest chapter 1 . 1/24/2012

I agree with your view on Freddie. That is exactly the same thing that happened to me. This video is just in case you're interested in more than pictures. It cheers me up on sad days. Or happy days.
UhmDraco chapter 1 . 8/22/2011
Hi so i just thought I would review this now, having read it a while ago but only recently made an account...

i really like the way you've portrayed Cormac... it was really well done. I really liked this :)
LongLivePinky chapter 1 . 2/28/2010
so yeah. that was pretty much delish. :] nicely done.
anonymous chapter 1 . 2/28/2010
Ok, it was good (i'll admit that) but i think you over did it on the "muscles" part, it makes it look like your obsessed (sorry, but its the truth) You have potential and i can tell you put a lot of effort into it, but you can do better (trust me, i hate it when people tell me that too) Anyway, another thing is, it feels like your "talking about the weather" when you, erm, write about this. Like you didn't really care that you (harry) just had sex with him. Just make it...more ok? You've done a fabulous job, so far :D
Master Gaga chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
more please.
vairetwilight chapter 1 . 1/7/2010
The plot was practically non-existant but the sheer hotness makes up for it. I saw a picture of Freddie Stroma topless as well. I think my brain may have stopped. I could stare at his abs all day long. Thanks for contributing to the sheer awesome that is HarryCormac
Lambertxxx chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
Harry and Cormac now thats fucking hot
TheHustler chapter 1 . 10/21/2009
I LOVE CORMAC. You have turned me. I think I may even follow suiit?
fifespice chapter 1 . 10/4/2009
Celestialuna chapter 1 . 8/27/2009
Oh my, that was really hot!
Donny Brooke chapter 1 . 8/23/2009
I actually liked it. i think u continue to find out where this can go. at first i thought that harry was going to be the school girl he said he was acting like. them he stared to get all normal when Cormac was sayin he didnt believe that LV wasnt back. but then when they were fuCKing harry went back to school girl. so my advise is to give harry more of a blocked angry side. like in the book hes all about his destiny. but now he can take cormac;}
StrangerSerenity chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
I loved it! Cormac and Harry were so amazing together. After reading your authors note I had to google Freddie, and let me tell ya your not the only one who almost fainted from his sexy shirtlessness(is that a word?). I hope you write more Cormac/Harry, I'd love you forever if you did :)
Ivey chapter 1 . 8/3/2009
Better, much better, you really need to get laid, though. Like, more than me, and that's saying something.
SmutSmutSmut chapter 1 . 8/3/2009
So that story was very interesting. It had its up and downs.

There were some good points and some not as good points.

Cormac was believable up to a point. In the beginning he was very in character but as the story progressed I got a little confused. There's no rhyme or reason as to why he jumped Harry except for the fact that there is "sexual tension." It might have been easier to understand if say he was fucking Harry because he wanted on the Quidditch team. If that were the case you'd need to spell that out more. But there just has to be some reason for him jumping Harry and WHY Harry.

Parts of it were a little hard to believe. Things like "He's the most gorgeous man in the entire world." While this may be true, because after all these are Harry's thoughts I find it a little hard to believe that in the entire world Cormac is the best out there. The other thing I had a problem with is the whole "kicked out of Hogwarts for homosexuality." I never knew Hogwarts to be homophobic {Dumbledore after all is gay himself.} So it seems a little unlikely. I also find it a little strange he's jerked off to the thought of touching Cormac's hair but I suppose whatever makes him happy is his business. You also tend to repeat yourself with "I would let him do anything." Maybe try phrasing it a little different, and over-use of the word actually.

"His luscious voice echoed through the dead hall filled with no one."

Harry was originally in his room because Cormac was leaning against his bedpost but now they are suddenly in the hall. And if the Hall is dead, it's obviously filled with no one.

The characters became a little unbelievable towards the end. Harry was very OOC at times. Some of your word choices weren't the right words as example: "His tongue impaled my mouth(...)" Impaled is defiantly not the right word. The imagery is horrible there. So perhaps try and think of different words, a Thesaurus is a good tool.

The sex was alright, painful sounding, but alright. The problem I had there was that Cormac kissed him and magically all better. I also don't see why Cormac wouldn't use "protection." They are wizards and there has to be at least a dozen spells to ease the pain, or ease it a little more than a rough fuck.

""Oh, me too," I said."

Harry doesn't sound all that into it, although his thoughts suggest otherwise.

All in all, the piece needs a few finer points to make it stronger and have a "sub-purpose." After all this is Porn without Plot, but some basic ideas of "why this, why that way, ect. ect."
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