|Reviews for Rache and Ross in shop!|
| ms.judy chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
this chapter had rofl-ing. thank god this is it. i might pee.
| ms.smith chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
hi. is this your first fan fiction? i was also wondering if you possibly used an online translator for this because some parts really just dont make sense at all. your dialogue needs a little work. maybe you could try acting it out with a friend, it could help... maybe you'll notice when you answer a question like "why do you beg?" with "nothing" because i do NOT understand that.
sorry to be kind of a jerk about it but i really want to help improve your writing.
using quotation marks would also help the reader (me) understand what is the dialogue becuase i personally was getting really confused with the dashes. you could also try writing it in script form if thats what you were going for...
i REALLY hope you take my advice into consideration... BYE!
| jenanistonfan chapter 1 . 7/21/2009
OMG LOL ANGELICA. That made me laugh out loud!