Reviews for Shards of Time: The Master of Death |
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evattude chapter 11 . 10/13/2023 Great chapter! I hope harry can keep this guy out of his business |
evattude chapter 10 . 10/13/2023 Great chapter! I hope the meeting goes well |
evattude chapter 9 . 10/13/2023 Great chapter! I wonder if harry will choose his disguise and have him made his proxy of a sort |
evattude chapter 8 . 10/13/2023 Great chapter! |
evattude chapter 7 . 10/13/2023 Go fawks |
evattude chapter 6 . 10/13/2023 Ron may have to grow up some to get over his prejudices (he isn't run by logic) |
evattude chapter 5 . 10/13/2023 I like how he's doing this |
evattude chapter 3 . 10/13/2023 Great chapter |
wiebenor chapter 11 . 4/5/2023 I do not hold much hope that this story will ever be continued, but if the author ever reads this, I will say that at the author is alive and ever willing to continue this storyline, I definitely will I'll read it. If I'm correct as to my guess as to why it quit getting updated, though, besides the usual losing interest in writing a certain story, if I may give a piece of advice, going further in your story? Okay, let's use the first wizengamot session Harry attends as an example... He goes to the wizengamot, then learns his counterpart's name, which then clues himself into what to call himself later when he time-turns; that should normally be enough nuance to imply that he's time-turned and seeing himself, whereas, you add a bunch of other content, which, for a "character development" part of the story is fine... Now, my piece of advice is this, now that that particular character's development is out of the way, it might be good to keep those scenes especially ones that cover multiple separate scenes, to a minimum that's required to tell your story. Using the wizengamot again, as a demonstration, he went, he sat with his time-turned counterpart, then later was back at Hogwarts, which THEN gives me the impression that he's ALREADY time-turned once, and AFTER thinking THAT, he goes and time-turns himself? While I understand why he does that, later on, it still doesn't dispell the feeling I get while reading it, that it almost feels like a 2nd time-turning, until he somehow goes back to the wizengamot... Now if it were me, I would just have Harry go into a restroom at the ministry, in the atrium, assuming they have any, then time turn to early in the morning, and leave to go to diagon alley, then to knockturn. Doing this would mean that Harry wouldn't be noticed when he traded his Potter face with the "secret agent" face, and went back in time, assuming of course, that time travel within the ministry is possible...(it's a normal time-turner, yet it goes more than 5 hours back in a single day, which is a loophole if you're going for "canon" time-turner use(you should label it as some kind of "special" time-turner if you're going for something non-canon used))(not counting cursed child as canon in the time-turner debate) My reasoning for bringing all this complexity up, is that if you make it TOO complex, then you'll be more likely to lose the will to complete the story because it's just taking too much "work" to keep things straight... At least, it would for me, because I definitely have a "scatterbrain" when it comes to complexities of story writing... All that said, what WAS written, is so far a pretty good story, with very little if anything left to improve upon, and I commend you for getting this far with the idea,cand I'll also be following this story just in case you ever update it, as id love to read more of it... |
Guest chapter 11 . 11/27/2022 I imagine ppl demotivated you after the crazy plot of meeting your past self without paradox and the obviously Death/snake incarnate. Anyways it was a nice try ans ita nice to see you let it here. I do hope you keep writing in your life, ff or not, and thst the years have been kind with youm thanks for your tale! |
Chaiiiii chapter 9 . 7/19/2022 wait isnt the Malfoys older than the Blacks? |
ManticoreBlues chapter 11 . 5/8/2022 highly doubt you are still using this account but if you are and you see this then I'd like to let you know I love this fanfic and would love to see it continued... you know, in spite of the 10ish years it's been |
Aki13S chapter 11 . 4/26/2022 Welll…morbid! That last line. You don’t have to go that far dude! I’m enjoying this a lot. Hope to see more! |
Coolfire30 chapter 7 . 1/13/2022 I will forever resent his placement in Gryffindor. Everytime I've read this, the urge to just drop the story is nearly insurmountable! But I know...I know that regardless of his placement... this Fanfic is a masterpiece. |
Coolfire30 chapter 8 . 8/31/2021 I feel relieved that your story has a standing interhouse connection, especially with Harry at the centre of it all. |