Reviews for The Prodigal Hero
CallaDahl chapter 13 . 2/26/2012
"Molly had been found in the living room, tied to her chair by her own knitting, and Fred could tell she had been kissed Molly had dropped her knitting and it caught on fire, the one reason Arthur likely never got the kiss, and their son had been able to save him."

WHAT? No, seriously, what?

Also, at the end, Fred/George mentions wanting to castrate Ron...this was already done in the chapter where he was tied up...
CallaDahl chapter 10 . 2/26/2012
okay, it's nice to see that Sev and Harry are getting somewhere.. but it really came out of nowhere. There has been zero chemistry so far
CallaDahl chapter 8 . 2/26/2012
Who's Augusta? And Alexander?

You really need to have introductions...

I assume Ronan is a centaur... which I shouldn't have to do..

You never really explained how Harry and Lucius ended up together... or why dumbledore is evil...Actually there are a LOT of plot holes
CallaDahl chapter 7 . 2/26/2012
Nice Hercules reference there. But you really should mention it in a disclaimer, as it's copyright otherwise.
CallaDahl chapter 5 . 2/26/2012
Brother? Sev and Luc weren't related...
CallaDahl chapter 4 . 2/26/2012
I had hoped the writing would get better...alas it has not. I'm sticking with it though!

What uncle does Draco have? (3rd line)
CallaDahl chapter 2 . 2/26/2012
Also, the title makes no sense... Prodigal does not mean what I think you think it means...

prod·i·gal/ˈprädigəl/

Adjective:

Spending money or resources freely and recklessly; wastefully extravagant.

Noun:

A person who spends money in a recklessly extravagant way.

Synonyms:

adjective. lavish - profuse - extravagant - wasteful - spendthrift

noun. spendthrift - waster - wastrel - spender - squanderer
CallaDahl chapter 1 . 2/26/2012
You need a Beta. This story has a good plot, but it's really hard to figure out what you're trying to say...

For e.g. in the first paragraph you keep using the words 'them' and 'they' but you're talking about different groups of people each time so it gets confusing.

Then you say 'The remaining members of the Order, most had 'accidents' if they survived the war, except lackeys like Kingsley, gathered.'...

I assume you mean ''Of the remaining members of the Order, most had 'accidents' if they survived the war, except for lackeys like Kingsley."

I have no idea what the 'gathered' part could mean.

I really want to read this, but having to reconfigure it in my head is a nightmare.
Sliver of Melody chapter 18 . 11/27/2011
Completely awesome. Loved it.
Neoma chapter 18 . 11/16/2010
WOW i love the story had me crying most of the time and had me balling after the last chapter.
HobbleFoot.11 chapter 18 . 8/14/2010
You truly are an amazing writer. All your stories are well written and really itriging. please never stop writing!
Georgia chapter 18 . 5/3/2010
Heart warming and kind of sweet. : )
Shells by the Beach chapter 18 . 1/29/2010
i have tears in my eyes. i love your story!
peachescream232 chapter 18 . 9/15/2009
Good.
sjrodgers23 chapter 18 . 9/10/2009
more please I love your writing thank you
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