Reviews for Shitto
MS Mysteries chapter 5 . 4/26
Tia-Mica chapter 10 . 1/3
You have a good story, I just have a few criticisms that I hope will make your story better.
Please, please read over what you've written before posting. This fiction seriously needs to be edited, and there are a lot of very obvious mistakes that show that you haven't actually proofread.
Try to keep your characters from being OOC. As it is, Ayona would never just crawl into an attackers arms and let him take her away, that goes completely against who she is as a person and as a Kannagi. It's actually against human instinct, and it's completely unrealistic. Also, Kazuma is the Contractor of the Wind, he's probably the best tracker in the world and you're saying he can't find Ayona? As if. I understand your desire to create drama, but you probably should have made a stronger antagonist if you wanted Ayona to be kidnapped.
I hope this helps your writing!
sakuraharuno316 chapter 7 . 8/21/2014
oh my gosh. this story is so amazing. im a huge fan of kazuma and kazuma. and this story is my favorite.
Chris chapter 14 . 7/11/2014
Ohmygod I loved this so much. So much! I wouldve loved to be able to read more, but I dont think you're going to. Also I saw what you did there with the chapter titles! Anyway, amazing story!
The Desire chapter 14 . 5/2/2014
AWWWWW, that was so adorable!
Stephano22-10 chapter 4 . 1/5/2014
I like it :) well done
rocknroll419 chapter 14 . 12/13/2013
I like this story! Good to see another side of Ayano being sad- with Kazuma there to comfort her. I have been too unsatisfied by the way they ended the series so this was a great story!:D
Anonymous chapter 14 . 12/6/2013
All the haters out there, just suck it up. I thought it was wonderful, so just be grateful that he/she took the time to write this, whether you think it's a piece of crap or not.
Guest chapter 14 . 10/19/2013
Ayano would be 23 in this chap since she is 18 in the anime and you added2 years of her and kazuma dating then her son is 3 years old add all that and you get 23
YellowOrangeRed chapter 14 . 8/19/2013
I just read your story and i have only one word : AMAZING *_* i totally approve your teacher idea about writing a book because you REALLY have a talent :) hope to read other of your stories :D xxx
5FreakyFingers chapter 7 . 7/25/2013
5FreakyFingers chapter 4 . 7/25/2013
Great story, I luv it!
KuroKanashimi chapter 11 . 5/22/2013
KuroKanashimi chapter 10 . 5/22/2013
honestly Really?! you're fucking up the story... he just admitted he let the youma control him
KuroKanashimi chapter 9 . 5/22/2013
? WtF why is she acting like a helpless dog?
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