"You know, to get use to the bond before a party?" It's USED. "You know, to get useD to the bond before a party?" The entire story you keep writing "use" and it's driving me crazy. It's USED USED USED!

This story is very strangely written...like it's been translated from another language. I tried so hard to get into the plot for 24 chapters but much of the writing is just bizarre full of turns of phrases that simply don't make any sense...as if English is not the author's first language.

The way you describe things is just odd..."circular driveway" should simply be "driveway". What's the relevance of adding the word "circular"?

Sex was a taboo subject between her Phoenix teenage friends? How so? Did Bella go to school with Saudis? Were all of her friends Shiites?

What an amazing story. I was so caught up in it. I yelled at my husband several times for talking to me during the end battle. I loved the witch concept. Thanks for writing.

This was such a beautiful story!

im so glad i found this story. I am just on Chapter 8, but I'm already trying to read it at a slow pace cause I already don't want it to end!

Thank you! This was awesome:)

This was an amazing story, thank you!

I loved your use of the characters and it was a great storyline. Shame there’s no sequel!

Sooooo good, have adventure, romance and story is really well written. Can you write a second one saying about the new generation? Pleaseee

It was great to read this story again. Thank you for sharing your talent

I have to give credit where credit is due. I have read so many twilight fan fic's through the years that I feel they are all blurred into one and are not well written. I can count on one hand stories that exceeded my expectations and I have to say without a doubt your story is one of the best I have read. Yes some characters got on my nerves but this story was well thought and well written and I have to applaud the writer. I have read this many times especially after I have read some shocking stories I come back to yours just to read a great story again.
All I can say is thankyou and well done...now it's time I think you wrote another lol

Go Bella! I'm really proud of her here too.

I think I understand what my problem with Bella was, for the last few chapters. It was how she distanced herself from her family. Yes, there are some big problems there. Potentially so big that it could threaten their long-term relationship. But being willing to dive into an arguably bigger commitment with Edward while keeping her parents away irked me a bit, I must say.

She is not a child of divorce She and her dad apparently had a close relationship. Her later attitude notwithstanding, Renee didn't seem to be that absent from her upbringing either, before coming back to Forks at least. So I'm having a little problem with her decision to be "cool" towards her own family, while trying to be "understanding" towards the likes of the Cullen males.

Or maybe I'm bringing my own relationship into this. I have ver close relationship with my family, especially with my mom. And admittedly, it almost always bugs b a bit whenever Bella is dismissive towards her parents in fics. I usually ignore it though, because it's justified by Renee's and/or Charlie's behavior. And here, in this fic, they're once again given the plot advancing parenting that causes so many problems for Bella. I guess this time, Bella's "distancing" stood out to me because the Cullen side wasn't that much better. Arguably more quilty, even, and Bella didn't even seem willing to hold a negative feeling about them, quite unlike she views her parents, who were strongarmed by Carlisle himself.

Not sure why I talked too much about this, but yeah. At least it's nice to see Edward becoming nicer. Surely he got that attitude from Esme, who is probably the best character here. When she doesn't excuse his son and husband's behavior away, of course.

Girl, why don't you speak up when Carlisle is methodically trying to disarm you and your family, using his authority to justify his control issues?! *Thinking* that you're angry, but not doing anything about it, not to mention accept the weak apologies so quickly... That would never solve any problems if the situational consequences were realistic.