|Reviews for Oiseaumouche|
| Desdaemona chapter 1 . 12/4/2009
Seems interesting,I'm curious who the girl is. How old is Alex actually?
I think your French is rather good, though you made some small mistakes, but that's only natural if you haven't mastered a laguages completly yet (I should know, I make them all the time, in French and English)
since you've asked, these are the things you might want to change: "je suis très attaché à vous" I don't think it's technically wrong, but it just doesn't sound right and 'vous' is either plural or honorific. You should just say "je t'aime (vraiment)" or (even stronger)"je t'adore (vraiment)". "mon cher" is masculine, to a woman, it's "ma chérie".
Anyway, I'll be looking forward to your next chapter
| pierre6690 chapter 1 . 8/11/2009
we do not say "je serai allé" the correct translation is "je serai parti". can i expect another chapter ?
| A person chapter 1 . 7/24/2009
Write more soon! I love it! :D