|Reviews for Holy Weapons vs Dark Forces: Re Smashed|
| SlasherMask chapter 32 . 11/19/2009
Weren't starmen alien robots controlled by Giygas? Anyway...
I finally have read this fic.. I have one problem that is that your critic humor is too preachy... Whats point of humor if its not funny? I know I have told of this before and you have disagreed, but I still think its lame.(kinda like in other story you had random mook insult brawl only to him get hit by missile(You REALLY haven't figured how Internet works yet... Because of anonymous posting you can say anything you want, annoy others if you want, say most horrible things people can say and never get caught. That and people have different opinions and some are idiotically believing that their opinion is only one, but thats kinda expected since almost every person thinks that they are right.)) I think that authors should avoid Author Tract.
I think there were some cheesy(though I do like some cheese. For example the defeat of King Starman was pretty cheesy because of friendship speech, but I didn't find that bad) parts in this fic. And BTW don't you kinda end most of your fics with party?
I sound kinda negative since I had to read whole fic, its harder to remember every good part and mention them... Don't take this review too badly.(to say positive things I would need to review like I normally do, individually every chapter) I really hate to sound negative.
| pgasniper chapter 32 . 10/17/2009
And I'm done...
Which reminds me that I have to also finish reading the rest of Super Star Wars Bros (at least until you got to the hiatus...)
Can't think of much to say. I don't know why, but it always seems like closing the story is the weakest part for you... You just do it so quickly, it seems sort of shocking that it is over.
Probably should start reading Adventures on Gillax Island right away, since I'm all ready three chapters behind... Guess I'll move on to that...
| pgasniper chapter 31 . 10/17/2009
They certainly had a much harder time fighting against Giga Bowser than King Starman. I think this fight was much better than the one against King Starman.
| pgasniper chapter 30 . 10/17/2009
The Smashers didn't seem to have much difficulty, once King Starman stopped teleporting around and they actually got hits in on him.
Guess King Starman had one last monster for them...
| pgasniper chapter 29 . 10/16/2009
Ridly never stood a chance... It was almost enough to feel sorry for...
Well lets see how this continues...
| pgasniper chapter 28 . 10/16/2009
So, Bowser is revived... And it looks like the final showdown is about to begin.
Well, lets see how this ends...
Onwards, to the next chapter!
| pgasniper chapter 27 . 10/16/2009
hmm... well they won... it certainly seemed difficult for them...
And that seems to be the end of Stu and Pid as well... Well everything seems to have worked out for the Smashers, save for that small detail of Bowser being dead, but I remembered Dr. Mario's Holy Weapon... so yeah...
Don't know what else to say...
Onwards, to the next chapter!
| pgasniper chapter 26 . 10/15/2009
Bowser died? Shocking swerve! It really, sort of, kills the drama when you know that he will come back... Although, I don't know how... So I guess I have that to look forwards too...
As for everything else... It looks like the Smashers have a tough fight ahead of them. (And you've posted your next story... Looks like I'm going to have to catch up... Sigh...)
| pgasniper chapter 25 . 10/13/2009
Bowser was kidnapped... Well that certainly was a shocking swerve... well lets see how this develops...
| Specter24 chapter 19 . 10/11/2009
Aw, crud. I wanted to catch up with the story before it was finished, but it's too late for that now. But it doesn't matter; I will still read the rest of this story.
Anyway, this was a pure win chapter. Not because I laughed so much at the S.P.A.N.K.M.E. part, but because Starman DX was defeated, and the mayor finally got what he had coming. Splendid job!
| pgasniper chapter 24 . 10/11/2009
This was a short chapter... (Oh... You finished the story earlier today... I have to catch up... Hmm...)
I really don't know what to say...
| JakeCrusher chapter 31 . 10/11/2009
Quite an intense battle, maybe in the future you should write a story about how the smashers were formed.
| Souldin chapter 32 . 10/11/2009
A nice tranquil ending to the fic although I feel as if this last chapter was rushed a bit. Anyway its the last chapter so I'm not going into great detail with this last chapter, rather here will be my Ultimate whole story review.
Lets begin with the introduction. The characters and plot was introduced quite well. The first chapter gave a nice in-depth look at what to expect displaying your writing style and narrative style, the way the characters are portrayed, the humour, the action and the setting of your unique smash bros universe. Despite not being particullarly detailed it whisked me into the story although one could say that having read previous fanfics of your universe this gave me an advantage never the less I believe it was a good start for the story.
Next up is the plot. It was introduced well and although it isn't an extravagant plot this was done when you had just first started really. The overall plot though is a bit bland with the sub plots of the characters such as Stu and Pid, Master Hand and King Starman as well as the incident with the Fire Emblem being much more interesting. This however is supported by the background storyline concerning the creation of the weapons and the Holy Weapons themselves which plays a great part in this series. If this was but a on its own story I would comment that the sub-plots are more impresive than the rather boring main plot but this is part of a series and the underlying plot is massive with a great deal of thought put into it.
Character portrayal is next which in a way is hard to judge as this is part of a series which has already portrayed its characters. The series is also a unique one changing many practicallities of the smashers making it hard to judge the characters. So I'll be quick with my judgement of the characters. Overall they all have unique characteristics and personallities however with such a large cast sometimes the characters seem very similair. Mostly in their views on good and evil which is strange for the darker character but they almost seem identical with the only variation being in Jigglypuff, Mewtwo and Falco. Though rather than focusing on the smashers I though I should focus on your large cast of OCs as well as the less appearing characters and Master Hand.
Master Hand is displayed as being passive and calm, often joking around with the smashers while at the same time guiding them really does give off the image of a Father. His free nature with the smashers and yet at the same time his concerns and protectiveness over them is seen well through how he lets them go off to all these places and at the same time coming to help them when things seem to be too tough.
King Starman is seen as an intelligent and sophisticated character however this can at times belittled by his great pride and overconfidence. He reminds me of Crocodile in a way with both having a normally calm and proffesional manner while at the same time having a brutish, arrogant persona to them. This came off well in the final battle as he became more and more frustrated.
Stu and Pid are the comical reocurring villians who never seem to suceed but despite how they are often seen as they have a great pride and seem to want to beat the smashers to prove themselves rather than any hatred towards them. This underlying characteristic was hard to see and I think dropping off an extra hint or two would have made it easier for people to become intrigued by them.
Mayor Peter and Mr. Nils are part of your often seen harted OCs in which you make an OC based off your hate and usually blow it out of proportion. While I have nothing against them being classified towards your hate so much I do believe that these OCs are often pitifully weak or seem to have no likeable characteristic which is bad grounwork for any character. I know of times when you can make an OC out of something that irritates you but still make them seem understandable. Apt and Tony are proof of this being characters that stem from bullies but have been explored in detail and have more balanced personalities and abilities. They were likeable and its a shame to know they are now gone.
Anyway next is setting which has turned out well having a range of enviroments and places explored although there were less of a mix of other games and anime than usually seen in your fanfics but due to this one not being as long and a remake of a very early fic I shall pardon you of this. Though not described magnificently the settings were well thought out especially the islands where setting affected the plot quite a bit.
Humour in your fics have always been magnificent with a range of humour of varying degrees and this fic was just like the others. Stomach bursting humour mixed in with smirk giving remarks made this a great joy to read where I always had a smile on my face. While at times it can be heavily focused on comical and parady humour you also have a wide range including echii, sarcastic, indirect, and joke based humour. I never had any worries.
Neither did I have worries concerning action because as always the fights were fast, fluent, well phased and vibrant. The only one worth complaint would be the Bowser vs. Statue when you forgot to inform us of the spikes as despite being humerous, it should have been looked over. Even when there was a large scale fight you made sure to include the whole gang and more. Some of the greatest fight scenes come from your fics and this one wasn't any different with the Apt fight being truly amazing.
Surprisingly I shall review your closing chapters but this is only the second last comment. The final battle was led up to well and had much tension. I greatly anticipated it and the final fights were remarkable in many ways, fast and well detailed being just a few. Tis a shame that the last chapter seems somewhat rushed considering your more amazing closing chaptters in your other fanfics.
Here is my last part. This has been a fanfic of sheer brilliance with many memorable parts such as the Apt, Giga Bowser and Ice Guy fights, the many humour scenes includng Roy and also chapters 10, 11, 12, 13 and 23. Your skill as a writer has been showing great improvement during the course of this fic and while some could say it was you getting into the flow of the story I feel as if you have improved (though you at a very high level of writing as it is). Overall this has been a joyous fanfic to read and review. Another great entry to a fantastic series of fanfics, keep up this amazing quality and I'll be sure to review your future stories. For now though, cheerio!
| Souldin chapter 31 . 10/11/2009
A great chapter with an amzing fight scene. The fight was large and intense and although large each of the characters had a role (admittedly some more so than others but thats to be expected). The fight was fluid and detailed with it being easy to understand what was going on.
A fantastic chapter with my only criticizm being that some characters had too little of a role though from what I read this only extended to Peach, Ness, Jigglypuff, Pikachu and Pichu. Great job, keep up the good work.
| Specter24 chapter 18 . 10/10/2009
Nice battles. I think Starman DX is going to get away in the next chapter, but I won't find out until I read it.