|Reviews for The Namikaze Legacy|
| Guest chapter 11 . 1/22
nice I love how 2 gen back fired.
| killer4853 chapter 1 . 11/30/2013
| AJGuardian chapter 11 . 8/27/2013
Ooooh, the Hokage is afraid? Bwaahahahahahahaaaha! Oh, no more updates for this story? Sad Panda no Jutsu
| AJGuardian chapter 5 . 8/27/2013
Editing could do some work. The flow just seems wrong...where did you learn English?
| AJGuardian chapter 4 . 8/26/2013
Still needs an Edit.
| AJGuardian chapter 3 . 8/26/2013
Your rewrite is still not very good. A few words here and there that make no sense. Misspelled, misplaced...oh the list goes on.
| no name chapter 11 . 2/23/2013
update soon for the love of god
| Ultimate Challenge writer chapter 11 . 2/6/2013
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA HAHAHAHAHAHA the genjutsus were hilarious and please update soon
| Ranmaleopard chapter 1 . 10/23/2012
this is really awesome and interesting i cant wait to see what happens next please continue!
| All-around chapter 11 . 8/15/2012
| AnimeMinder chapter 11 . 6/15/2012
Please make a update on this fic I really want the follow up please.
| Rybalov chapter 11 . 4/22/2012
| Jamalymal chapter 11 . 1/14/2012
Okay I am really confused with what their ages are do could you add a time line of all these events and naruto a age because I'm not sure how old he or his girlfriends are. Also why us all of this happening. While he is in the academy?
| StormeSkyes chapter 3 . 10/6/2011
This... was as far as I could get. There are a lot of different writing styles in the world... I don't know what category this one would fall under.
There are many problems with this fic, But the most glaring one is the blatant disrespect for concept of causality. Each chapter so far has basically just been a list of events, with little or no explanation of why all these random things are happening. And even the events with a cause are simply stated as if it's a memory rather than an actual scene unfolding.
The second obvious problem is just a complete lack of direction. The events don't follow any logical progression, it's like you had a bunch of ideas for what happens and you just typed them one after another. Each event isn't necessarily impossible, but given the characters involved, you give no explanation as to why they're acting the way they are.
I'll describe it like this: There's canon Naruto, and then there's your fic. There are many many differences between the two, in terms of history of the world and the characters involved. Because of that, it's much more necessary for you as the author to walk the reader through an exploration of each characters motives, passions, desires, and perspectives. Why did the 3rd Hokage stand there and let a child attack allied ninja? Why did none of the top Hyuuga have the ability to survive one attack? Why did Naruto call Hinata pretty, and ask her to train with him when they were in the academy when that didn't happen in the manga? We could assume reasons for all of those things, but there shouldn't have to be assumptions, you should have set up the scene so the motives behind all the strange events were clear. Or at least set it up so that it was obvious your intention is to create a mystery. But as for why Anko is engaged to Naruto? Beats me.
Anyway, the premise of the story was decent, but the take home message is you gotta take your time and tell the story instead of posting a glorified outline to .
| Kira1993 chapter 11 . 9/23/2011
HAHA way to go Naruto XD I so can't wait till you update this story XD