|Reviews for Revolution|
| ichigorukia4life chapter 2 . 8/7/2009
omg, your such an amazing writer! I love the way you portrayed both characters! I hope you update soon !
| Seyy13 chapter 2 . 8/7/2009
It's interesting so far! Your interpretation of Sasuke's character is good - cold and mysterious, and he's got the whole getting-away-with-murder thing going for him too. I can't really relate with Sakura, but that may be simply because we don't know much about her in your story yet. I think people are used to seeing Sakura as the character that they already know everything about, while Sasuke is the one that has to be developed. I look forward to seeing how both characters will develop in the future; if the way Sakura acted in the first chapter was any indication, I'm sure she will turn out to be quite interesting. Update soon!
| Unsawr chapter 2 . 8/7/2009
I can see that Sakura needs to be more careful now that a new predator has appeared, especially one who is going to be around her 24/7. Since anyone who works for Danzou is bound to be up to no good.
But besides that, I have to say, the communication between Sasuke and Sakura is a bit-ick.
I know you're trying to get a whole 'chemistry/curiosity' thing between them so you can work off that but sometimes it's better off if there's not such a solid base and things start off slow.
Like at the part when Sakura just suddenly wanted to touch him, I thought that was a bit too sudden.
First of all, she'd just met him. And she already had him written off as dangerous and a bit eerie, so I don't think she'd just get a sudden urge to reach out to him on their first meeting.
Curiosity is a good trait you have going on there, as I can see why she would be curious about this type of guy, but too much curiosity, like that, just ruins it.
Sasuke's characterization is going alright so far, overall, I just think the pace needs to be slowed down a bit.
I know all of us can't wait for the romance to start but it's not really worth it if it's rushed.
| The Disappearing Me chapter 2 . 8/7/2009
No, it didn't disappoint! Which is good, because I was already disappointed by one fanfic with an awesome preface this week. But this was AWESOME! And, surprisingly enough, I'm not confused, which is practically a miracle for me...I get confused really easily. But the tone with this is more mysterious, like you'd hoped, than confusing. You've not only grabbed hold of my interest with the preface, but you've kept it with this chapter. It was far better than satisfactory - it was fantastic! Great job on a chapter well-written! Keep writing!
| angel puppeteer chapter 2 . 8/7/2009
Amazing! Do continue.
Slow pacing, but it's the road that counts, eh?
| Anzer'ke chapter 2 . 8/7/2009
And then Naruto jumps out the shadows proving that pyschotic, paid killers don't have to be cheerless, emo-boys.
Would Sasuke still be scary after fighting off an assailant with intent to nuggie...most likely XD
Great chapter, this story is developing nicely, in fact it's good enough that I'm reading despite the fact that normally I tolerate SasuSaku at best.
Peace out and Rock on,
| bcnxkdhjvb chapter 2 . 8/6/2009
I love the way you captured the preliminary relationship. It fits canon, but it fits the story too.
I'm so glad I stumbled on this. Your style and your character interaction are just awesome. You get the essence of a dark fairytale (for lack of a better description) really well too. I especially relish your italicized lines. They're really fitting and poetic.
I hope you continue it soon.
| Neon Genesis chapter 2 . 8/6/2009
First off. Great little quote you have up there at the top - even if Stephen King DOES scare the crap out of me.
This is just so well-written. Tight and flowing and continuous. You gave just enough political intrigue and whatnot that it has a plot, but not so much that the reader's going "Well, that's nice and all, but what about the SasuSaku?"
Which, of course, you did marvelously. Preliminary SasuSaku, for me, is always the most interesting. The most telling. I think you got it down just right, according to their circumstances.
-laughs- And, yes, it was more "oh mysterious" than "wtf's happening?"
The standalone phrases in italics? Yeah, those are all gold. My favorite one is still "What God forgot you?" because, MAN, that is just incredible.
| more more more more moreeeeeee chapter 2 . 8/6/2009
wow its really cool sakura sounds like a complete differnt person that i've seen in some fics nice! xD i lvoe it more
| Neon Genesis chapter 1 . 7/30/2009
"What God forgot you?"
And just like that, I'm hooked. A very strong, very striking, very, for lack of a better word, insightful line.
(This story makes me want to work on Sweet and Low. -_-)
This captures attention, and it flows beautifully. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. :)
| Anzer'ke chapter 1 . 7/29/2009
Oh this one looks like fun.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Peace out and Rock on,
| pockybandits89 chapter 1 . 7/28/2009
very descriptive: I like it!
I'm looking forward to more
| The Disappearing Me chapter 1 . 7/28/2009
OH! I love it! I didn't read it the first time, but I can just tell this is going to be amazing if you keep this level of writing up. I LOVED this line - What God forgot you? AMAZING! It made me happy...some short sentences are more powerful than a whole page. Great job! Keep writing!
| ichigorukia4life chapter 1 . 7/28/2009
your a very good writer, i could picture it all! i can't wait till you update !
| sunnyblueskyes chapter 1 . 7/28/2009
I don't know where you plan on taking the plot but it's really intriguing so far and I will continue to read it, should you choose to continue.
Sakura's attitude towards others, her opinion of them, and her insight towards them makes me curious about why they are what they are. What led Sakura to regard them like she does?
And her view of Sasuke is riveting, the flow is really wonderful.
I hope you do continue this and I'll be looking forward to the next chapter!