|Reviews for Let It Snow, Baby Let It Snow|
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/25/2015
It was obvious it was your first time writing a lemon, wouldn't be surprised if it was your first time writing, period. I also found it very distracting how you kept adding things in parenthesis in the middle of a paragraph. Quiet honestly I don't care about what you're saying and I feel as though it distracted me from the story, making it worse. Not a bad concept but you could've put more effort into it.
| M chapter 1 . 1/26/2015
There are quite a bit of grammar mistakes, punctuation mistakes, you don't use commas where you need them. In the line "stop teasing Kevin" you were telling kevin to stop teasing, but the reader reads it like you're telling someone to stop teasing Kevin. The way it should have been written is "Stop teasing, Kevin" then it shows that the name is separated, therefore you are speaking to that person. I noticed that and misused words on quite a few places. Fix it.
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/16/2013
LOL that end bit so hilarious
| YinKeket chapter 1 . 6/15/2013
lol throwing balls of snow at Kevin. cute Ben has a a crush on him. nothing like a snow ball fight. plus yay for Kevin having a crush on Ben too. the puppy dog eyes at times really does work. nothing like hot chocolate near a fireplace. yay making it better by kissing. yay they are telling each other how they feel. well done on your first lemon. keep up the good work and do your best.
| loverboysgirl chapter 1 . 2/28/2012
| Filomene Hara chapter 1 . 10/17/2010
LOL! thats awesome at the end [good writing ;)]
| unwanted- angel chapter 1 . 12/1/2009
lol! i loved that story! it was the first ben/kevin i've ever read, (with lemon) and i loved it! , loved the ending way more than i should, lol! great
| whitemokona234 chapter 1 . 11/10/2009
yay it's another awesome stry from this awesome website! *sighs* what a sweet story, and i mean that in mor ways than 1! i'm glad it didn't really end like that. ben would've been really pissed at his parents... same thing 4 kevin. if they did end up happenin'... would they let kevin get his clothes first?
| mangamoo1 chapter 1 . 11/1/2009
good lemon very nice and overall good!
| secretkeeper13 chapter 1 . 10/25/2009
aw thats cute. Love the JK ending in real life that might have happened but of course for people like us we never let it die.
| magic drack chapter 1 . 10/18/2009
HA! this was possibly one of the most entertaining stories for Ben10 i have ever read...loved the parents joke lol
| Chomps the Insane chapter 1 . 9/24/2009
Hah! You should've counted the parents situation! That would've been hilarious overkill though. ( RN: I thought BEn's parents were dead? ) Anyways, nice story. Your first lemon? It was great. The hot cocoa lubricant made me laugh.
| kuramaxkarasulover chapter 1 . 8/6/2009
Very good i loved it, hope you write more
| Miss Macabre Grey chapter 1 . 7/30/2009
Well...they were some obvious mistakes, though that doesn't make it any less than an obviously good story! Keep at it, yo!