|Reviews for Mistakes|
| Violet chapter 1 . 4/11/2010
Why won't she realize that she is meant to be with him and not Raph!
Would love to read more...when will she learn?
| iyimgrace chapter 1 . 8/5/2009
Completely awesome. I love the inner Mary dialog, so rapid, so snarky, so very Mary. It must be horribly overwhelming to be inside her head. Her outer dialog is fantastic too. You have her voice and inflections down pat. I loved the musings as to which quantified as an irreparable mistake. And while it was only slightly on the side of her having feelings for Marshall it remained true to character. Very well done! Thanks.
| Mia chapter 1 . 8/1/2009
Loved it! Very true to character, I think... and of coures a little heart-breaking.
| Dahlia Faith Black chapter 1 . 8/1/2009
Mary and Marshall will always be okay. (I hope.)
| yankee306 chapter 1 . 8/1/2009
Nice job! I like the schizo internal dialogue - I think it works well here.
Two nits on word choice:
"Kablooie" seems too frivolous and jokey for what happened, especially given your use of "haunted" right after it.
Instead of describing Raph's mother as "Hispanic," why not be more precise and say "Dominican"?