Reviews for Rachael
ElfenTears chapter 1 . 7/17/2012
This was so good! I think you are a very talented writer. This story is definitely one of my favorites.
EonComet chapter 1 . 6/5/2010
oh my!

i never really seen a SH monsters POV fanfic, but this was indeedly sad for the poor demon to suffer like that, but at the end i sort of cried that she was finally at peace... great story, i love it!
Artificial Flavoring chapter 1 . 12/18/2009
*Applause* That was magnificent. Your should spent a bit more time editing, there were a few sentences that dragged on or didn't make a whole heck of a lot of sense, but all in all it was great. I really enjoyed your perspective. The last few lines were unexpected, and Mind* me in the best of ways. Just wonderful of you to show the goodness is Alessa and a nurse, very cool. Okay I'll stop now.
ArmoredSoul chapter 1 . 10/14/2009


Brain asplode from scary awesome writing of EPIC PROPORTIONS!

Nocturnal Blue chapter 1 . 10/10/2009
all i can say job.
beth.e.belle chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
bitter sweet and sad,like the ,well, the movie.
xXxZexionxXx chapter 1 . 8/22/2009
Oh my god. This story for some reason, it's just so good. I mean. I love how Rachel is still finding it hard to cope with how she's changed after about 30 years.

It hurt my heart when you find out that her brother is as dead as possible. But it was a bitter sweet moment when they were talking.

If this had a rating system I would give this a 10/10!

Keep it up! :D

Makichan123 chapter 1 . 8/22/2009
erm... THis is interesting. Not many fanficts about monsters. Poor Rachael, I feel bad for her T_T
ice dyaty chapter 1 . 8/11/2009
I liked this story very much... You are right, not many writers create stories about the monsters...The ending was bittersweet and tender...Who would have thought Alessa could offer solace...
Arktos chapter 1 . 8/4/2009
Not bad! I entered this story skeptical, but I have to say I'm impressed. Not only did you pull of an OC with relative ease, but you also managed to do the 'monster with a mind' angle fairly well.

There are a few things I would tighten up, such as Rachael's backstory. While fascinating, I felt sometimes like sighing because I either guessed what she was going to say or wished she would say more about her confrontations with the other Silent Hill characters (e.g. Harry, James, Henry, Heather, Alex...). I'd advise just to cut some of the extraneous bits about things the audience can guess and focus more on Rachael's place in the present.

Another complaint I have would be the treatment of Alessa. Although I do agree that she is as likely to condemn as she is save (as reflected by her treatment of Rachael) I felt having her explain herself ruined some of the suspense.

That said, this was a beautifully unsettling fic that left me both happy for Rachael and sad that it had to end that way for her. I'd give it a B for execution and an A for originality! :)
Drackwolf chapter 1 . 8/4/2009
that was... so touching ;_; , never tought that maybe one of all those monsters at least, could still keep a human least this nurse was released from her ethernal punishment, not like many others... it was a happy ending in some way. You did really well with this one , you write better every time, and youre one of the best autors here that i know. you really have a gift and you need to keep developing it , thats what i like of your stories, you portray the feelings and emotions so well :3
Rainfox88 chapter 1 . 8/3/2009
0.0 woah! Lol, this was another good fic! I like how you placed all kinds of SH monsters in the story, along with the many locations. I feel so bad for Rachael! I did like her little brother though! and of course Pyramid Head is always cool! Awesome!
xSummonerYunax chapter 1 . 8/2/2009
Wow! I have to say that you have managed to turn your original story into a lovely one-shot that's filled with suspense and emotions. It's practically a re-write of the original. I feel so bad for Rachael after reading this. I can certainly see why this rated M lol. It's sad to see that she has gone through what other nurses had gone through-being raped by Pyramid Head. The descriptions were really strong and vivid, and definitely added to the intense and dark atmosphere/mood of the story.

Additionally, I love how you added other characters such as Alex and James. The years between Alex's visit and James's visit to SH shows that Rachael has been there for too long. I also think it is time for her to rest and I'm glad Alessa granted that even though it was through a cruel mean. It kinda makes you wonder if the other nurses in the game felt the way Rachael did.

Glad you wrote this. It's a great addition to the rated M section of Silent Hill and this story definitely has originality. Never seen anything like this one before. Great plot and of course, great creativity as usual!

Can't wait to see what else you have in store as usual!