|Reviews for Second Start|
| hydrangea wine chapter 18 . 9/24
Interesting story, but as of this point I have only read up to chapter 18. With all of this talk of quidditch in addition to how Severus reacted to coming into possession of a broom stick, I was wondering if Voldemort never taught Severus how to fly in your AU.
I had always thought that Severus being the only wizard able to fly without a broom stick in the novels, with the exception of Voldemort, was a great example of how powerful he was as a wizard and of how effective he was in deceiving his "master", as such deception was to the extent the dark lord felt he should teach Severus something so undoubtedly useful.
It would be a shame if he did not possess this skill in your story.
Anyways, thank you for bringing this story into our HP fanfic community. It is quite entertaining!
| Patronus de Lune chapter 67 . 9/17
Hey! I really love this story! But actually, because of my very low english level, I am not able to say more it this review. Just... continue!
| wyoh chapter 67 . 9/13
Great fic. I enjoy the multiple POV. It is nice to see ship fics that don't focus entirely on the couple. I find this gives more depth and builds a world. While your fics don't go into too much detail about the setting, the dialogue is so well done and the writing is economical-every detail is considered carefully and not bogged down with excess. I love how this makes the story light, yet rich in quality.
I'm glad to see your later chapters using dividers between scene switches. This makes transitions clearer. Some recommendations on future writing and editing:
Your Volde seems a bit OOC. I do not know if this is your intention. While your teens read like teenagers, and characters like Albus, Nicolas, etc... read like adults, Voldemort seems a tad teenish.
There are still some minor grammatical issues in previous chapters, mainly spelling. I'd revisit them and do some minor patch work. Lastly, when talking about the quidditch teams in the last chapter, you mentioned Moldova. The story takes place in the 60s/70s. Moldova was apart of the U.S.S.R. and wasn't an independent country till the 90's. Hope this helps! I look forward to your future chapters!
| Guest chapter 67 . 9/2
Wallagra is a bitch.
| Bellatrix 4 ever chapter 1 . 9/2
| Gunslingers-White-Rose chapter 67 . 8/30
...And then the writer died. The end.
All jokes aside, I love this. So much. Everything is good. I love it.
| Mrs.A.Northman chapter 67 . 8/14
Really enjoying this story - looking forward to the next chapter
| 0 Show me love 0 chapter 67 . 8/7
I love tour history!
| Guest chapter 67 . 8/4
Please when does the next chapter come out i have to know!
| zkosinski823 chapter 67 . 7/23
Please update, this story has we wanting more every second.
| Guest chapter 67 . 7/20
Hey, I absolutely love this story. Can you continue it, please? It has not been updated since March. Please?
| Kyria Greene chapter 67 . 7/6
Fantastic story! Love how your simple changes make such a huge difference in the characters' lives. Cannot wait to read more! Thanks for writing!
| Mari Wollsch chapter 67 . 6/20
super story, let wallagra black tell and the board test remus and they will find that he is not a werewolf xxxxxxxx
| X chapter 2 . 5/24
James is so out of place in Ravenclaw, it's funny hahaha.
| X chapter 1 . 5/24
Good so far. Severus in Ravenclaw is fitting.