|Reviews for Naze?|
| OllyOllyOxycodone chapter 13 . 9/30
Imagine writing up Naruto the way you have for 12 chapters. Being insanely fast, trained by Konan and Pein, being a blood thirsty psycho, and having this super duper "Only person to ever have it" dojutsu. Then have him almost lose to a chunin exam level Neji... Then having Naruto pull this kaioken ripoff out of his ass next chapter. HAHAHAHA! To make it better the author wrote "The reason why Naruto had such trouble is because he is better." when people let him know how shit that chapter was.
I will also go ahead and agree with some other reviewers. Thank you for your attempt at writing a Naruto fanfiction. Thank you for quitting when you realized you could not.
| sasukesdoom chapter 18 . 5/28
It was interesting to start with, and the way you protrayed Naruto's character was really logical but eventually ... it just got to a point where it's like, are we still on this arc?
also... potential plot hole ... if naruto wasn't trusted with anko, why would pain trust naruto with a mission to konoha (despite the potential benefits in resolving his doubts) without a contingency in place? he should've known that naruto's emotional state would've lead to a bunch of mistakes, not to mention the very real potential for him to be captured. idk just doesn't make sense to me but considering this story's dead... eh.
the writing itself was pretty detailed and vivid, although I felt the language was kind of too flowery at times (if that even makes sense).
| CapriSunnyD chapter 1 . 4/29
Story and main character falls to pieces around chapter 18. Now that I have read the majority of the story, it is quite easy to see why you stopped writing it.
| Nina chapter 21 . 3/7
So. Naruto really just goes with the flow. I have to admit, I’m disappointed. So much for having bonds with Pain and Konan and his adopted village. But you have evoked my sincerest and utmost hatred towards the Council that I now want to eviscerate and pour acid on. V indifferent towards Sasuke and Sakura (probably because their display of outward remorse is so mild that it’s more like Naruto got a scratch to the arm and not blown half to death). Nevertheless you have a clean, smooth narrative structure - even if I do have some dissatisfaction with how things are playing out. (Loved, loved, loved the battle between Naruto and Neji. I think you’re one of the very few authors capable of getting Neji’s characterization RIGHT. His entire thought process was all very Neji-esque, cool, logical, and regal. I loved how he pushed Naruto to his limits and the elegant way he recognized defeat. Honestly I could sing praises about this fight for hours XD)
Very cool jutsu names and the bond/friendship between Naruto and Anko was both hilarious and heartwarming to see :)
| Chin x2 chapter 14 . 12/27/2017
Why are they even thinking about the idea of capturing jinchuriki when they are this weak, at least right now.
| Chin x2 chapter 13 . 12/27/2017
Lol he lost to a genuine neji which weak canon naruto was able to beat. This is why I hate plot driven(lack of a better term) where stuff happens just for the plot and forgets the build up of the whole story had.
| Chin x2 chapter 6 . 12/27/2017
Your naming sense is really horrible. I doubt anyone still remembers naruto's alias and also those konoha base names lol
| Ridunkulous chapter 23 . 11/30/2017
Maybe you've been discouraged by negative review and that's why you've stopped, but this is an awesome and interesting take on almost all of the other Naruto stories that I've read. Ignore the haters! People who comment about ways to possibly improve the story are good. Welcomed, even. People bashing your fic without giving any feedback? Overlook them, if you can. Block them out! Come back and finish this!
| Ridunkulous chapter 23 . 11/30/2017
Just want to start off by telling you that your story was one of the most... intriguing stories that I've read on the site. Also, well done. Everything from the plot, the character's (slightly) altered personalities, all the way down to the unique way that the story was written fit well together.
It makes sense that you only focused on the war in the beginning few chapters. After that, it becomes a mere backstory, I guess. Something important, but isn't the main focus throughout the course of the story. It did play an important role because it became a key event in said war becoming the catalyst for Naruto to change as a person. But, as mentioned earlier, it's not annoyingly prevalent. Meaning that not every character mentions it in their dialogue or thoughts... If that makes sense. That's just my takeaway from that aspect of your story.
Secondly, the way you wrote the Hokage's personality made complete sense compared to his in canon. In the story, he truly does act and think the way someone would in his position. He's the Hokage, but instead of acting like a friendly grandpa-like person in canon, he's more like Danzo. But instead of just "doing what it takes to protect the village" Hiruzen is intent on spreading The Leaf's influence throughout the country. Danzo was war-hawkish. So is Hiruzen. But instead of just wanting to "protect" the village, he wants to make a name for it. The thing that I had a problem however, was that his way of thinking towards Naruto and Jinchuriki contradicts what is written when he has his first encounter with Jiraiya (or somewhere along that line). He's thinking about all of the people that he believes he failed. And one the specific names was Naruto. And then when he talks with Jiraiya about Naruto it was only to put false hope into the man. It's later confirmed because he only did it for Jiraiya to get out over his depression so he could become of value to the village. Plus he made it up. Also, he only wants Naruto to stay in the way Danzo in canon wanted him remain in the village. His status as a Jinchuriki. For all of the good intentions he seemed to have in the middle of the story, his actual view on Naruto is that he's interested in him for his own personal gain. And simply nothing more than that.
Finally, there's Naruto himself. It does well for his character when he has his altering mood-shifts. Although, they happen too frequently and drastically. In one instance, he wants to be accepted back into the village. He longs for the lost companionship in which he once had. And in the next instance, he's debating on whether or not he should kill whoever he's thinking about. Those two affects of his traumatizing childhood event headbutt each other and hinder his developments as a character, but it makes sense why he goes through this. You didn't make him out to be some psychotic killer who's all dark and evil and only wants to hurt everybody else. You made him out to be a confused preteen who's trying to figure out his emotions.
It's been, what, 5 years since you last updated this story? And for whatever reason(s), you haven't continued to write and finish it! So... come back and finish it!
It had a bit of a dull streak for several chapter's, but literally, it's at a cliffhanger right now!
Maybe you've already finished the other parts to this story and you're just waiting to bombard the site with updates. Maybe. But you've gotta come back and finish this! It's awesome!
| Malfe chapter 1 . 1/31/2017
A good akatsuki naruto? Didnt know it was possible! Good job!
| OllyOllyOxycodone chapter 12 . 10/14/2016
Going to drop this here. While the idea of this story is pretty great, your writing wasn't up to the task.
| Bombertank chapter 23 . 5/27/2016
Almost might not read anymore if it's all talking in the chapters. Like the last 4.
| Bombertank chapter 21 . 5/27/2016
Wow was really good until the last 2 chapters
| ZoomStraightToTheMoon chapter 13 . 4/28/2016
I'm done. I hate Pathetic!Naruto fics. You set him up to be some kind of badass and yet he is garbage. I guess the training with Pain and the missions where he had to go kill people didn't pay off.
| OGkitchen chapter 23 . 10/10/2015
Story is awesome please come out of hiding and continue? Pleeeaaasssseeee