Reviews for Naze?
10ofHearts chapter 21 . 8/21/2013
well that was a stink turn of events. and sometimes your story can be too descriptive. takes forever to read. and the personality naruto has in the story kinda pisses me off, always second guessing himself, every...single...time. its so annoying to hear it repeat and repeat and repeat like a broken record. move on already sheessh, kinda drags on and on basically prolonging the story from moving forward and it gets real boring, i can't believe i actually kept reading the damn. i mean naruto's not even in akatsuki and yet. well watever it was a relatively decent read not exactly top of the list by far. pretty good plot, changing from canon storyline and originality was cool. but identity revealed almost immediately after the 4 year (i think) before his return and personally i think it made naruto's returned presence less significant in a way that would grab someones attention fully like if he revealed himself whilst in akatsuki uniform or smething. it lacks the pazazzz or watever
juvenual chapter 15 . 7/30/2013
I think you did orochimaru perfectly, he's evil, in a sense. But he's a scientist, a learner, a sadistist one yea but like loyd yup watching wanting experimenting with new and odds of things . Sociopathic killer just not some big bad evil villain from a cartoon( well he is but... You know) this is more realistic, and with naruto and Anjou just letting mature their own way, finding their own peace in killing, their sadistic sides , is good they find balance sorta but still very sadistic :p great story I love this, plot, atmosphere, and character developments and their own "feel to them" they're like in cannon,some, but more realistic, with war and life & human interaction. Good job my dear air or madam good show indeed
lmc9389 chapter 4 . 6/17/2013
Too many plot holes and hard to follow. Way to much filler, time to check out
KingKillerq chapter 1 . 6/6/2013
The flashback was well placed, gives Naruto a reason to fight and become a shinobi for people who hate him, something that is often hand waved in stories as he's 'the Messiah'/Ninja Jesus: doesn't cut it for me.
The circumstances behind this should be simple enough to follow:

Naruto is walking down the road, villages glaring/ignoring his existence and some details that tell us our character is young and some foreshadowing about his mental health and situation when he is pulled into a short flashback fleshing out his overall goal or rather why he changes his desire from not becoming a weapon (because they are thrown aside when they become useless) to becoming a weapon (to protect Sakura and ensure her happiness). While you also explain why he didn't what to be a shinobi and how that changed (one of his core character traits is keeping his promises and he, well- he kept his promise) the war with Kumo sign kind of kills any pride we feel for our blonde. After that is a rushed paragraph about inventing a social persona based on a rather flimsy excuse (Hand wave) involving the council. Something that only hit me on my second reading of this chapter (I do it to get all little things) as in the first I was too swept up in Naruto's emotions to pay attention correctly. Anyway, then we hit the prank/Academy section, first day of course, Naruto's behavior is consistent (Beautiful even if it’s the only the first chapter) with his flashback and we get a hint of the Kyūbi acting as an improved healing factor.

Overall I like the direction you’re going with this and it fills a plot hole regarding Kumo and Konoha, mainly why didn’t Kumo attack Konoha when they lost Minato. Their Tailed Beast would have certainly given them an advantage/opening, with the help of a sneak attack by Killer B could have easily damaged/killed most of Konoha with a Tailed Beast Ball.
Or they could have, during the Hyūga Incident; something that could have sparked tensions in your verse and led to war (perhaps Konoha refused Kumos’ demands?) kidnapped Naruto (a three-year-old at the time) and raised him in Kumo. Bam! Three jinchūriki, that'll kill the status quo for sure... Off on a Tangent, sorry.
Anyway good fic so far. Finally what does 'Naze' mean and could you perhaps enlighten me why you chose such a title? (Feels like I should know it though)
Quazillionaire chapter 23 . 4/22/2013
Well, I sincerely hope you're still out there and this story hasn't been abandoned to the dark archives of unfinished tales, because Naze? is a real diamond in the rough - "the rough" being the collective crap that makes up 85% of the Naruto fanfiction on this site.

So, yeah... Awesome work. I love this story and would be overjoyed to see it completed to its fullest extent. I hope you weren't put off by the shittiness of the canon story recently. This story is way better than canon anyways.

Peace out!

Not insincerely,
Light chapter 23 . 4/5/2013
I dont inderstand why ppl vent their anger out so rudely. Yes, you made promises; but havent ppl at least think that youre busy and something came up? I know they rly want to read your stories (and i do too) but some of your readers just dont give u the appreciation u deserve. Ppl have different mindsets after all.

Please continue! Patiently waiting and always will have ur back!

Besides, you have more readers than those who flames at u combined
dbztenkaiichi chapter 1 . 3/26/2013
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Relativeness chapter 1 . 3/21/2013
Authors like you give the rest of us a bad name. When i started reading your story i was blown away and when i was up to date and had to wait i was giddy when i read that you were going to update regularly. i was extatic.

We are exactly one year further and you still havent updated.

You utterly disgust me with your lies. And rest assured i'll make sure that my readers wont touch your story.

Im sorry i have to write like this but you ruined my favorite story on
Doctor Dandy chapter 3 . 3/10/2013
Your Naruto is annoying, and I find his ideals laughable. I will not read about such a worthless fool.

- Thorndsword
Guest chapter 22 . 2/24/2013
Truthfully I clicked on your story looking for a realistic Naruto betrayal story. I quickly saw that this wasn't the case, but I continued reading. I love the idea of the story but you tend to be long winded about certain things that don't answer the questions in the summary. Im not saying your story sucks but it truthfully doesn't keep me completely entertained. Often enough I find my self skimming through the chapters instead of reading them. Also a lot of your ideas in the story are good but the actions taken after them have me questioning a lot of things. Although I ferrel when reading anything questions should form but not in a sense where the reader stats to doubt the story. I enjoyed what little I did read and wish you the best of luck.
zafnak chapter 19 . 2/10/2013
I really like your version of Orochimaru. He seems to have a real gallows humor about him.
zafnak chapter 14 . 2/10/2013
Heh. Naruto should have just said he went Super Sayian. LOL
UniCryin chapter 23 . 2/1/2013
Great story! :)

Please update!
chaosreaver chapter 18 . 1/8/2013
chaosreaver chapter 10 . 1/7/2013
idk if they have by now or not but i really hope that sakura and sasuke find out thats naruto some point soon. good story so far, keep up the good work!
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