|Reviews for Time Bump|
| Nana56 chapter 3 . 9/7/2009
Whew! That was really something! Poor Sam...I can't think of much that would be more terrifying than being buried alive in a mine. Ugh!
Nicely done, hon. :)
| Maz101 chapter 3 . 9/7/2009
Ok. So, not a vision and not a spirit ...so, what then? V mysterious - and that's good! Sam's suffocation was well done - terrifying. The whole "shoot me" business was great Winchester stuff too!
| Ciya chapter 3 . 9/7/2009
Holy crap! Who was more freaked out in the hotel room - Sam being buried alive in his dream or Dean walking into Sam not being able to breathe? Total toss up.
| bhoney chapter 3 . 9/6/2009
Wow. This was a fantastic chapter. I was so scared the boys were going to get lost in the mine, or not be able to get out again. That was just freaky.
“I’m not shooting you, Sam. I’ve been shot with rocksalt before, it hurts.” I loved that, even though technically Sam's the one who shot Dean last time, Dean refuses to put his brother through that.
For some reason, this struck me as funny: "“Dean. Shoot me.” Sam crossed his arms over his chest and stared obstinately"
“Fine, then try stabbing me with a silver-edged knife. Maybe that’ll work. But I don’t think so.”
“Would you please shoot me?” In the next second his face crumpled, “I don’t want the spirit of someone inside me. Dean? Please?” I could just see Sam stubbornly insisting on being shot, and it kinda made me laugh. But then he broke out the puppy eyes, which of course worked. I was really surprised Dean actually shot him, but they are the puppy dog eyes, not to be denied, LOL.
I loved this, too, it cracked me up: “Now roll up your damn sleeve or I’ll knock you out, tie you up and not shoot you.” ROTFL What a threat!
And then, so typical that Sam would complain about being shot, after demanding Dean do it. Just like a little sibling. *snickers* “You shot me!” Sam leaned against him, “No, I’m not okay.”
“You should, after shooting me and all,” Sam smirked.
But then-woh, intense scene back at the hotel. Uber creepy and suspenseful. SO glad Dean got there to pull Sam out of the nightmare or whatever before he actually died. Scary! I'm very nervous about them going back to the mine after all this.
I'm LOVING this awesome story. Please post more soon!
| bhoney chapter 2 . 9/6/2009
Wow, great descriptions again. I really felt transported to where they were, could picture it all really clearly.
This was a great detail: "Dean cleared his throat wanting to be sure Sam saw the lifted eyebrows.” LOL
And this cracked me up: "Dean burst out laughing when he took a closer look at the offering. “Oh, look at that one, her dress is up over her knee.” He flipped through the pages. “Pre-Civil War porn.”"
Hm...I have to wonder if there's something off about Sam being so cold. Is it just that he can't handle the extreme temp, or is it something more?
“A collapse in mining terms is called a ‘bump’. I guess that makes it all warm and fuzzy. Sounds a whole lot better than ‘tons of rock falling on your head’.” Again, sounded so much like Dean. Love the snark.
This made me smile: "What do you mean, stay here? I’m not a little kid, I don’t stay here.”
Them being in the mine was really creepy, especially with the rocks continually tumbling down. I wanted to scream at them to get out. I was actually starting to feel a little claustrophobic. And then Sam-the one who made Dean promise not to go into the mine-ran right into the mine! I can only imagine that mist or the lights made him think he saw Dean getting pulled into there or something. Wild.
And the mine used to store parts for a chop shop? Excellent idea!
Can't wait to find out what's going on here.
| bhoney chapter 1 . 9/6/2009
I said it before, but it bears repeating: this was great. LOVE the injection of humor throughout-Sam hitting Dean with the peanuts, Dean's crack about clowns. Great banter. You did a fantastic job with the characterization, too. Sounded just like them.
And the descriptions were wonderful-you really set the scene for us, especially in the first part when the mine collapsed. Very cool! Great atmosphere!
I loved this:
"“About a month before your fourteenth birthday.
Pulling his eyebrows together, Sam huffed, “how do you even know this stuff?”
Dean snorted and tapped one finger against his temple, “Steel trap, Sammy, mind like a steel trap.”
“I think the trap needs some WD40.” Sam grumbled and walked away.
LOL Loved that Dean actually does remember when the last time Sam took a bath was, and the banter cracked me up. Excellent start!
| TraSan chapter 3 . 9/6/2009
Woo Hoo! Awesome installment, girly. *snort* Sometimes, Sam's logic works against him, eh?
Oh man, that nightmare/vision of Sam's was awful! So glad Dean was there to bring him back.
Wonderful job, looking forward to more.
| gidgetgal9 chapter 3 . 9/6/2009
Wow, the mystery deepens. I loved the rock salt scene and the brotherly banter. And the hotel drowning scene was so creepy and scary. I with Sam, what a horrible way to die. Awesome chapter- I look forward to more! :0)
| TraSan chapter 2 . 9/2/2009
Oh man, what's going on in the mine? I've been roasting all day and this chapter honestly gave me the chills. Excellent!
| Ciya chapter 2 . 8/29/2009
Sam ran back into the mine yelling Dean's name? So either he thinks he's running out of the mine or he thinks something took Dean.
| Nana56 chapter 2 . 8/29/2009
Sheesh! Why did Sam insist on getting out of there and then run back into the mine? :( More info please!
"I’m not a little kid, I don’t stay here.” I loved this line. Really had me cracking up.
And the pre-civil war porn...lol Sam knew Dean would appreciate that. Good one.
Glad Dean left the jacket for the mice. Good idea.
| jensensgirl3 chapter 2 . 8/29/2009
Juat found your story, I like it so far. Oh no Sam is in trouble again, so trouble find him or he finds trouble.
Can't wait to see what happens to Sam, and if Dean can find him before anything happens.
| linz chapter 2 . 8/28/2009
I LOVE your writing. I am crazily excited by this beginning of what looks like another amazing story coming from you. You can bet I'll be checking back every day for updates haha
| TraSan chapter 1 . 8/19/2009
| Ciya chapter 1 . 8/18/2009
I want to see Sam flicking peanuts at Dean. LMAO!