Reviews for NDB
irnzenmonk chapter 6 . 8/27/2013
good story so far ne
Alphonse.25 chapter 6 . 4/10/2012
omg, what a great story plz update when I got to the end of the chapter I was sad that there were no more, place update
Dragon KeyboardFreak chapter 6 . 10/21/2011
This is really good and well written. I hope you update again.
Furionknight chapter 6 . 3/6/2011
:)
Kage Hasu chapter 6 . 1/17/2011
This is definitely an interesting concept. The idea that only Naruto's father's students are aware of what really happened eleven years ago is something not used. . .like ever I believe. What does NDB stand for? Does it stand for anything? Update soon.
Wicken25 chapter 6 . 1/12/2011
Umm did you die? it has been over a year and four months and this story is really good! I like it alot that it gave me ideas for a story I might write so I need to ask you permission to use your idea.

update please!
Ccebling chapter 6 . 12/16/2010
Wow you only got this far and it's almost 2011, oh well at least it's not the most non-up to date.
fallin460855 chapter 1 . 10/25/2010
Did you know that this was actually the first Naruto Fanfic that I ever read? I found it over on Tonfa like 4 years ago, and it completely ruined me for any other fanfic before or since. I've been trying to find it again ever since, and I find that you've not only revamped it, but u stopped upgrading like a year ago. I'm well aware that there are people on here that have a life, but if you are abandoning this fic , could you at least either post up all the chapters you had previously posted, or give an authors note saying that you are discontinuing it?
Sora Tsuiki chapter 2 . 7/27/2010
Still here, reading...

Second paragraph first line, wouldn't it be The men and women WHO stand there...? sorry :p I'm not that great but I'm trying to point things out. And same paragraph, it should be "another air shattering roar" instead of roared... "House sized" should be house-sized (same para). When describing the shinigami, you dont add any apostraphes (' - those, however you spell it...) when you should. In the flashback, Kakashi asks why the Yondaime would want obito "to raising [youndaime's] son"... When shortening the name Gamabunta to "Bunta" you need to add an apostaphe before

You know what, I feel like I'm not doing what you asked, so I'm going to stop for the next chapters, and if you want me to continue, simply reply. Especially since I don't see how what I'm saying truly helps your story, to me, grammar mistakes don't really ruin it :) Its a great story and I hope you continue with it!
Sora Tsuiki chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
You know, I've been looking for this story forever, and totally thought I'd never find it... but thats because you changed the name! and even then, you havent updated in almost a year... it kinda makes me sad for this was actually my favorite fanfic I've ever read and I can't even reread the old chapters :(

as for errors, I dont know what you're looking for, but in the first paragraph, "...nature. ,This extraordinary..."[sic] with the period and comma together. Then, third to last paragraph/sentence you say "..began to resuming..."[sic] when it should be began to resume... and those are the grammatical errors... if you're looking for anything else really, just tell me and I'll check it out as best I can! :)
Shuuu chapter 1 . 7/13/2010
Dude, thank GOD your continueing/rewriting this I LOVED this story and was sad when you stopped writing it.
Shizuka Taiyou chapter 6 . 5/22/2010
Oh how I love Naruto.

C.D.
Shizuka Taiyou chapter 5 . 5/22/2010
I wanna see Naruto grow up in this fic again. Can't wait.

C.D.
Shizuka Taiyou chapter 4 . 5/22/2010
My man I might be rereading this but it is still awsome to read.

C.D.
Shizuka Taiyou chapter 3 . 5/22/2010
Still loving this. Loving more in love with this fic.

C.D.
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