This confused me so much, the tickling part especially...

but it was interesting to read.

I like your writing style and you have good pace.

Brilliant you really don't know how long I've been waiting for an update, please update soon, or I'll cry very loudly and near you pointing at you!

So yea please update

well looks like they got off to a bad start ur good at bringing the excitment in!

please rite more soon!

A well written story thus far. You've done well with the introduction to the story, and the theme seems promising. I hope to read more of it soon! Keep up the good work! :)

short but a good start i hope u rite more soon!