|Reviews for Foundations|
| Jman7 chapter 30 . 3/4
Your fanfics are interesting, but I would like it if you exclude some things from canon from the FF9 game because frankly, I found the game to be badly written and the love story as well, you don't have follow the game exactly because the romantic development wasn't the best written and was irritating, also you never had Steiner get called out on punching zidane in "brick by Brick" and didn't have him apologize either since the whole thing was a misunderstanding, and you had garnet push away zidane durning the angst chapters.
Also this is just a suggestion but you should have it in the canon of your story that zidane and garnet actually went together to burmecia in the game, because I hated how that scene played out in the actuall game, the characters were being stupid and it interfered with the love development, but it's just a suggestion I'm not forcing you, do what you want.
Also maybe you can have it that zidane and garnet actually met before in the summoners village before it was destroyed, and also have kuja more sympathetic and regretful: because I found him to be badly written in the game too.
| Cait Beepo chapter 30 . 3/3
I read all of this in one fell swoop today. Brick By Brick included. And I understand if daily life is getting in the way of completing this story... that's pretty normal with age. I'm replaying FFIX for the, like, millionth time, and how you write these stories about Zidance and Dagger fucking blows my mind. If you need any help - any - I would love to assist. As a big fan of this story, and the game itself, please - PLEASE - finish this at some point in our lifetime. It's too good to leave.
| apples in the rain chapter 9 . 12/23/2013
Well, I've sort of just been merrily reading along, since I'm like 15 chapters later, but my mind keeps jumping back to this one. I just can't figure out what Dagger was so impressed with at the beginning. I mean, later she sees all the wedding arrangements and stuff, but at the start it's just. . . sea, waves, and a pleasantly familiar sandy beach. You know, stuff that a person's more apt to praise a deity for creating, not a lover for picking a romantic setting. And she's forking out disbelieving credit to Zi, and it boggles my mind because I just can't picture what's got her so impressed that she's beyond words. And Ruby's apparently doing something or another, but I'm not really sure what.
Ah, sorry though. I know you prolly wrote this part like... *looks at dates* four years ago? Sooo, yeah. Usually I feel kinda weird critiquing old stuff, but I'm a thousand times more apt to review if I do find something that bothers me, and well, you do seem to be still writing this thing. *shrug*
On a happy bunny trail, it's pretty amusing that they're getting married a second time on the same continent. Although, when I went through the game I kind of pictured it ending with Zi teasing Dag about getting married on -every- continent. But seriously, that boy would definitely kidnap his girlfriend and steal a wedding. Heh :P
Dag choosing -not- to tie him down is pure gold.
| linkthewarrior chapter 30 . 8/1/2013
Great work, can't wait to read the ending!
| Caitlyn-4479 chapter 30 . 7/31/2013
At the start of the uni year, on the cusp of a new ff9 file, I started reading Brick by Brick again, a sort of 'childhood' (read: adolescent) favourite of mine. Reading it again was a delight and I immediately started reading Foundations straight after. I read it on the bus, between lectures, during lectures! And now I'm dying to know what happens next once again! I'm feeling just as frustrated as Garnet - I want our Zidane back! No doubt you've got something great in store and I'm so glad you're staying faithful to this story. Through the years your writing has stayed consistently wonderful, and yet I can see a shift and improvement in the style and calibre of writing. I hope you use this talent to its fullest and I can't wait to see what else you come up with! I know you're concentrating on personal works now, but I hope I'll be able to read them one day. (Hint: publish to Australia!)
I'm so sorry for the lateness in saying this, but I'm so sorry for your loss. I can't imagine low hard it must have been and still is, and I wish you and your family my best wishes. It would have been so easy for you to abandon this, but you haven't, and that's a rare quality a lot of writers lack - persistence and a passion for their work. Be very proud of yourself and keep up the great work!
Truly, you've been a mentor to me throughout my years as a growing writer. I don't post here anymore but I still write, and so much of my inspiration comes from you. Thank you for being such a great role model. You will always be someone I look up to and I always enjoy going back and reading your work. Especially, I have to say, 'Fur beneath her Fingertips', an old favourite!
Good luck with your personal endeavours and works and I can't wait to follow this story to its end - though it'll be very sad when it's over. Your perception and characterisation of our beloved monkey boy will always be close to my heart. I can't wait to (hopefully!?) see him bounce back to his normal self in the coming chapters!
| Flake of Snow chapter 30 . 7/24/2013
Fantastic stuff. I really can't sum it up any other way than that.
From right up until the first chapter of BBB, you've kept the characters...just that - in character. I can picture them saying and doing literally everything they've done up to this point, to the extent that i'm surprised half of BBB wasn't even in the game. It should have been.
I have a similar attitude to Foundations. You handled the political business better than you seem to have thought you would, and repeatedly i've broken my own promise of saving the next chapter for later; I simply couldn't wait.
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter, and the one after that, and the one after that...and so on. It'd be a great waste if you were to stop now. You do have a gift for this sort of thing.
| unprettierxo chapter 26 . 7/18/2013
Ahh the thought of a little baby mage... it's just so adorable.
| hikari chapter 30 . 6/28/2013
awesome story so far. keep updating
| Zarina3908 chapter 8 . 6/18/2013
This is, quite possibly my favorite chapter of Brick by Brick and Foundations put together. I think it's just because I like guy to get slapped when they need to be. Also, Dagger slapping Zidane is more entertaining that it probably should be. I'm a good person...
| hplo chapter 1 . 6/11/2013
This is turning into the Berserk of fanfics lol. But yeah, this is a great story. Good, detailed characterisations and great interplay between Zidane and Garnet, they actually do seem to have a very believable relationship. Your writing flows well as well but I feel that the descriptions of how a person is feeling can get too clichéd at times, especially all the heart metaphors which can get a bit cringeworthy at times. Steer clear of those and show more than tell with the feelings. Also I felt the lemon was too overdone with the melodrama. It's sex, that's all. Honestly, despite my criticisms I did enjoy this story as it did really capture the essence and feeling of FFIX and Garnet's relationship and you can't really ask for more than that.
| Zarina3908 chapter 30 . 4/9/2013
Oh, you writer types! Always have to leave us on a cliffhanger don't ya? Can't wait to see what happens! (Hope it dosen't take a year, haha.)
| sup3rl0z3r chapter 30 . 4/2/2013
gah! I lied. I already reviewed but decided to do a guest review under my name. I decided I wanted more of this story so bad that I'd reread BBB and this from the beginning to feed that need while I try to be patient for you to write the next chater. even with two jobs and school I finished it way faster than planned. augh! I meant to do just a chapter a day, but I kept reading everywhere I went (including sneaking paragraphs while working and getting funny looks for squeeing like a fan girl behind my phone. ) anyway, I guess where I'm going wih this is that I absolutely love this fic and I can't wait til you get the time to write the rest. I loved it even better than the first re through and I'm driving my fiancé insane by recalling to him all my favorite parts (he hates ffix for reasons I've yet to comprehend).
also, you might be happy to know I liked the wedding way more this time around (maybe its because I already knew the outcome, or possibly I'm less of a prude now then I was when I reviewed that chapter)
oh shoot, this review is getting long and I've still said nothing of any value. I just have one more thing to say. Is everyone's aura(or spirit colory-thing.) the color of their trance? I noticed Kuja was red like he was in trance and I got giddy of the idea of a pink Zidane spirit floating around bahaha.
sigh. I'm gonna go reread some other fics of yours now. okaybai.
| Milana992 chapter 3 . 4/1/2013
Heya. (and sorry about spelling mistakes I will mostlikely do since I'm using my grandma's computer and this keyboard is kinda hard to use)
Anyway I wanted to voice my opinion about if zidane was lost like 1 or 2. In my opinion it was 1 year. why? Because it fits into story better. He coming back next year with show and all. why would they skip one year? They were talking about rebuilding Burmecia so why would they do it after 2 years? Vivi's death. He did live more than year didn't he because he was build to last longer. Honestly I don't really care if it's year or 2 because story goes well either way doesn't it? And now to hair. My hair is also fast growing type but. Garnet's hair's legth wasn't even in her shoulder when she cut it. next time we see her she had her hair reaching almost at her butt. so let's say that her hair did grow 50cm. Human hair grows 1cm every month that makes 12cm for year and 24 for 2. so realistically (if we look of her hair) he would have been away about 4 years. But then again this is game.
But anyway in my opinion year fits better for scene yet I think that it works just as well as year or two. also it says some time later. it doesn't prove anything doesn't it? But Garnet was with Zidane about 2 months after her b-day and before Zidane went missing. So actually he wasn't away even year. But game clearly did not say if it was 1,2 or five so I think it's purposely left for us to decide.
| Angelalex242 chapter 30 . 3/31/2013
Ah, so this finally got continued.
Kuja may have done his brother a favor...that pit down there...like I said before, Zidane's Terran soul should stand out among the many Gaian souls.
| Myshu chapter 30 . 3/20/2013
Egads, the cliffhanger! Er... cliff faller!
And we're back with another brilliant chapter. The opening spent describing Iifa's state of creepiness was excellent and set a really unnerving mood. My favorite line there was 'a bouquet of crippled arms reaching into the dark sky'.
A lot of crazy reveals here! The plot thickens, as they say. Kudos for making Soulcage legitly menacing-I'll never think about that leaf attack the same way. And hurrah for Blank rushing in at the last minute! That guy's my hero.
Can't wait to see what happens!