Reviews for Alice's little girl: ON HOLD
Guest chapter 16 . 1/30
cmon chapter 17 this is a great story
truugoddess chapter 16 . 9/27/2014
It Was Good At First. Bella is Acting Childish and Immature . I understand what Edward did was wrong but not so much as you did your Mother like that. Smh
Amaryllis D. Namikaze chapter 13 . 8/28/2014
Surely you meant "we WERE" instead of "we was"? It's a great story and the plotline was very well thought, but there are silly grammatical mistakes that should be avoided. I mean, I know it's hard to write with no mistakes - and I myself hate proof-reading - but things like "we was" and "could of" are just wrong.

Anyway - I hope you don't get mad at me for saying this, but, oh well - there was some points in your story that are too rushed and somewhat TOO out of character. You have complete liberty of changing the characters' personality, of course, but some moments just don't match with the way you psychologically describe said characters. All in all, it's a good story to read. Keep up with the good work.
Guest chapter 16 . 8/2/2014
Hey update please
misuky7 chapter 16 . 6/10/2013
This is a really sweet story. :3
jenn008 chapter 16 . 3/23/2013
Loved it!
plz chapter 16 . 12/27/2012
plz update and i have a funny idea. Maybe u can have Bella sing Beauty and a beat and have Peter help a little a little singing some parts. Whole they are singing they are also dancing with u can have it on Alice's, Rosalie's, and Emmett povs. ANd they can all do this after school.

and what happen to the LA PUSH pack
Cullenboys Luver chapter 16 . 12/10/2012
Keep writing stories plz.
MCR Killjoys chapter 16 . 7/19/2012
please update soon

if you decide to that is P

Becky xxx
twilightgirl310 chapter 1 . 7/17/2012
love it
Sonicthehedgewolf chapter 16 . 6/12/2012
This story is really good and well thought out. Can't wait for the rest
Anariel Phoenix Blade chapter 16 . 6/1/2012
Great story. Will they ever forgive the Cullens? Please update soon.
HisSecretLover18 chapter 15 . 4/22/2012
What's going to happen next? Will Bella ever forgive the Cullens? Does she miss them? Is Charlie in this story? I hope you update soon please.
Bumblebee transformer lover chapter 16 . 4/7/2012
Love it
Rhea Sadie White chapter 16 . 3/3/2012
I love it I think they should makeup some time. If Bella's still half human you could have her and Jasper have a kid. I love it so update as soon as you can.
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