|Reviews for What If?|
| where she went chapter 1 . 3/31/2011
| CaspieLove23 chapter 1 . 8/23/2009
I so wish the season had ended that way!
The way this was written was perfect and it makes me sad that this didn't really happen!
| Kiwiflea chapter 1 . 8/17/2009
Hi! Your story is lovely, and I wanted to point out two mistakes that you could fix to make it even better...
In the beginning of the flashback, it says that "Casey walked into the ZBZ house," when it should be that she walked into the KT house. And then a bit later you say “You think it’s clarity but it’s not, it’s a post somatic stress reaction." I don't know if this is a typo or not, but the term is actually post-traumatic. Hopefully this is helpful!
Keep up the great writing!
| Padiddle chapter 1 . 8/16/2009
This was cute. If only this was the "real" ending. ;) One typo-you say Casey walks into the ZBZ house when it's really the Kappa Tau house. Another thing-you write very long (almost run-on) sentences. The story would be easier to read if you divided your writing into simpler sentences.