|Reviews for Trust, Loyalty, Commitment|
| teambellaedward chapter 9 . 9/18/2009
| PLV chapter 1 . 9/18/2009
Sounds good. -D
| ES3 chapter 4 . 9/18/2009
It's funny isn't it, how many people read and don't leave feedback? I really enjoy getting to leave comments, get feedback of my own and converse with the author through review and reply about their chapters. I can't imagine why more people aren't interested.
Another great chapter. I like how you put some sexual tension in there (they are human, after all), but keep Bella and Edward apart as the time is not right yet for them to be together. I also appreciate that you haven't made Edward perfect, as so many people do. His character is really much more interesting in the 3 dimensional way that you write him. Nice work!
| ES3 chapter 3 . 9/18/2009
I love how well-researched this story is. It's nice that you give us the little background tidbits in your author's notes so that we can better relate to the references in the story. You really have a knack for writing conversations and making everyday moments like Bella and Angela sitting around together seem absolutely authentic.
| ES3 chapter 2 . 9/18/2009
Oh, I love this story and it's definitely going on my alerts! This is completely different from anything I've ever read and I love the pride Bella exudes when she reminisces on her heritage and the town she came from. In a fandom where so many couples jump into bed by chapter three, I like that your Bella knows who she is and is not afraid to buck the trend and stand for what she believes. Fabulous!
| ES3 chapter 1 . 9/18/2009
Great prologue, I like the way it gives us a hint of the action that is to come while also showing us glimpses of Bella's ideals.
The site is being slow over at Twilighted, so I'll review over here for right now. Let me know if you would prefer me to review here or there in the future!
| nexxus123 chapter 4 . 9/17/2009
okay so I thought I put this story on my alerts when I reviewed chapter 2 (that was the latest chapter you had posted at the time) then literally, today, I'm sitting at my computer and I randomly, out of nowhere, recalled your story and wondered if you updated and maybe I didn't get the alert with all of the FF problems lately. I checked my story alert lists to find it and it wasn't there so I had to search my reviews to find the one I left for your chapter 2. And so I finally found it...now I'm behind, LOL - but I'm excited because I loved the first few chapters and I was looking forward to continue reading it. So hopefully you didn't think I gave up on it...anyway, it's all settled now, LOL..so confusing.
Anyway, back to your story and this chapter in particular. I loved it!
Bella's conversation with Alice was great and very informative.
And Edward going to Tanya to relieve his sexual tension from seeing Bella - gr, LOL - but again, I loved it! The talk about the Therapist and his issues was interesting too - I find it fascinating to get into your Edward's head - his voice is so vibrant - quite the contrast from Bella - you've done a great job.
One of the things I struggled with early on was trying to give Bella and DeanWard distinct voices without Edward's only difference being swear words..I'm into my groove now but it took some time - but with your story, you've done it perfectly right off the bat!
"Former gymnast that she was, Bella’s heart did a long-hang kip in her chest." - what a GREAT line!
Edward's reaction to Bella getting pushed was great too - we all love savior Eddie, hehe :)
| Bella Baby24 chapter 2 . 9/16/2009
I'm liking faith-based Bella. It is definitely a different Bella.
| Bella Baby24 chapter 1 . 9/16/2009
Talk about an intense preface. Way to build intrigue.
| sshg316 chapter 8 . 9/14/2009
A friend rec'd this to me today, and I so glad she did! I am completely enthralled. The characters really draw the reader in, despite the atypical characterizations. That is quite a feat in and of itself, but I am intrigued by the storyline as well, especially now with the addition of James. Alice's visions as prophetical words of God is such a great twist on Meyer's version. I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this one!
| ecxe chapter 2 . 9/14/2009
i love your religious references at the beginning, and the way your kinda tailored the prologue of twilight to your own prologue. twas very clever, and im really enjoying your story thank you so much for writing it!
| jjuliebee chapter 8 . 9/12/2009
Great chapter sweetie! I'm actually Bella's not waiting around for Edward, so he's getting all jealous. I know that James is a bad guy though and I fear what's going to happen.
Glad E is going to get help and seem to be reconciling w/ his mother.
| pillow912 chapter 8 . 9/12/2009
| teambellaedward chapter 8 . 9/12/2009
| raven1212 chapter 8 . 9/12/2009
Just finished all of the chapters, and I'm liking it so far. It's pretty different from what I usually read. Looking forward to more.