Reviews for Doover
SunshineWitch91 chapter 13 . 1/15/2011
Interesting story. Well written.
emotionalpoemgirl chapter 13 . 3/7/2010
Bad jake!
emotionalpoemgirl chapter 1 . 3/7/2010
What about Gazzy and Angel?
1254789-ACS chapter 3 . 12/7/2009
Gah! I'm mental. I meant one thousand words. I don't know where the ten came from.

(That what I get from reviewing early in the morning.)


1254789-ACS chapter 2 . 12/6/2009
Grr... Sorry. I meant ten thousand words. I write it with a comma, and then FF shortens it to just ten.
1254789-ACS chapter 1 . 12/6/2009
First off, this is extremely short. Try to aim at 10 words per chapter.

Second, discription! You could of had five chapters on simply getting to the School.


"I blacked out. When I came round I looked around to see that my flock had vanished. Panicking, I flew around for hours trying to find them but they were nowhere to be seen."

How did she black out? Where was she when she did? Around a campfire, in the woods, in the air, in water?

When she came around, where was she? In a cave? In a tree?

She flew around for a few hours... Where did she look? Did she fly over forests, did she check in nearby caves? What did she do, or was just flying around panicked? That little half a paragraph could of been 10 words easy.

Jeb seems... Kind of disconnected. I don't know, but if I'm freeing birdkids illegally and some girl starts screeching at me, I won't be calm.

Overall, interesting idea, but the lack of discripton and time taken makes it feel rushed, leaving the reader confused.

awesome chapter 13 . 12/6/2009

so far it so awesome

update soon!
crazyperson17 chapter 12 . 10/10/2009
sghope16 chapter 11 . 10/4/2009
Oh, Directors in trouble! Max is so going to kick butt! update soon!
crazyperson17 chapter 11 . 10/4/2009


crazyperson17 chapter 10 . 9/15/2009
omg he left!
awesome chapter 9 . 8/31/2009
omg he picked max? awesome! luv it!
crazyperson17 chapter 8 . 8/23/2009
omg! what who will he choose?

awesome luv it!
awesome chapter 7 . 8/22/2009
awesome luv it!
Buni1995 chapter 7 . 8/22/2009
Awesome story! Please write more!
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