Reviews for Loyalty
evie.izzyjaz chapter 2 . 8/27/2015
i wish sakura didn't hate naruto.
bloomsburry chapter 23 . 8/22/2015
Sinister hime chapter 23 . 8/7/2015
Okay, first off- this story blew my mind in a direction that it never really went to, and trust me, I went in a dew directions. The entire concept of Sakura getting stronger because lacking... well, any kind of true friendship bonds and motive had been tested around the site in many ways, most of which are surprisingly well written. Usually, Sakura resolves her entire career around her team or her village and finds exactly why she risks her life daily on being a ninja, ninja way, will of fire- bla. But your concept is special, because it basically revolves around her betrayal to the village and it tests the shaky grounds that not many writers step into- village politics, the hidden but existing darkness behind the peaceful facade and wavering loyalties. You really made all that step into clarity, and shown a point of view of a ninja with no prodigy skills or heroic mind change, evolve and basically question her dangerous path in life- a point of view of a reasonably normal girl stepping into the jungle and managing to survive. *stage whisper* Loving it!
I have to say, that you really got me hooked up- the entire caravan to Suna got me glued to my screen and that moment when it was up to Sakura to put her plan into action, but the backs of many-so-called friends left her behind (except for Hinata, bless her soul)- OH GOSH, that was...
I was frowning on Kiba's and co. reaction to Sakura as they sneered down onto her and basically decided to not give her a chance and ran away like headless cickens into battle scene, I really was- but I squealed on the inside, because SOMEHOW that made me like your story even more. "Sakura goes through the struggles of a lonesome wolf, yes!" Im morbid I know.
Also, can I mention you have a very unique way of portraying all the worst kinds of wounds a person could get without it becoming potentially life-threatening; I mean, I know her arm will function again somehow in the end but DAMN (This is putting me back into the HunterxHunter series all over again- bonus points.) :-D
You know, I dont think I fully realized how really scary this story was until you just up and killed Hinata. I literally threw my phone as far on the bed as I could and blinked really hard "She just killed a potential supporting character- just like that." That was the moment I realized the plot is a lot more serious than I took it for. Youre not sparing Sakura in this fic, are you? XD
The river arc was a great breath of fresh air after Suna's desert and empty struggles, not to mention all the snakes huddled up everywhere around Sakura after that. Also, I love your fight scenes. They are intense, strategic and desperate- great combo for the main heroine, seeing as shes tasting a lot of that throughout the story.
I honest to God didn't think Konoha would give Sakura such a pardon on her actions; I understand the politics and webs Orochimaru placed on his own merry way do hold their own dangers, but still, I didnt expect for Konoha to reach out such a gracious hand of mercy for such a treachery. To tell you the truth, I imagined that Sakura got captured and secured inside Konoha, and right upon her judgement day Kurotsuchi (did I spell that right?) invades the village, explodes and enters the building of an ANBU warehouse and frees Sakura in the process, all for the sake of her revenge and basically not giving a damn about the consequences (of course, she'd hide her true ninja identity somehow) because Sakura left her with a scar or got the upper hand in the last fight and she couldnt let it go without payback. It sounds silly, but I can already see them emerging from the debris in the sky, yelling at each other and screaming justu left and right- it made a nice picture in my head. Though, your version holds much more promise than mine.
Kakashi cares for his students; two teammates of Sakura's that hold too much emotion to function, Sakura's mother is facing the equivalent problems of a ninja in puberty and Sakura is in deeper shit than she realized if Orochimaru still plans to stretch his ego for Sasuke. Yup- I really wanna see where youre going with this.
skywiseskychan chapter 23 . 8/3/2015
I am still loving this story. And this is the first of the many interesting reactions I'm looking forward to reading about.
advancegreen chapter 23 . 8/2/2015
I love the direction of this so much! You can really see why Sakura wouldn't have too many problems aligning herself with Orochimaru. A nobody like her is disposable to both sides - but Orochimaru, at least, is honest about it.
Guest chapter 23 . 7/26/2015
What happened to the zest of the second arc? This is awesome but not as full of life as previous chapters. Do you need a break?
sakuras.horcrux chapter 22 . 7/25/2015
OOOHHHH Is that what Orochimaru told the Kazekage on that paper? That Sakura was the kyuubi?
angiewan601 chapter 5 . 7/25/2015
morrodin chapter 23 . 7/25/2015
Yay, another chapter! I think I'm starting to look forward to this a lot more than most of the others I'm following.

This chapter really nailed home just how well and truly fucked canon is, which is great. You have a very original story here, and it's seems like it's really starting to come into it's own.

Great, great, great job with the last part of this chapter. Emotional scenes are _hard_ to write, and you nailed it.
Flip Ants chapter 23 . 7/25/2015
Kiba taking Hinata's death as badly as could be expected and I can't begin to imagine what's going through Shino's mind at the moment.

Since team 7 needs another member and Kiba is grounded, will they offer Shino the spare position?
GabxLuci027 chapter 23 . 7/24/2015
Interesting can't wait for more!
Michi-Dae chapter 23 . 7/24/2015
Yeeeees! That moment when you don't feel sorry for the main character suffering, after all, it keep us entertained! :-D
The Imperfect Me chapter 23 . 7/23/2015
Hope to read more! :) I find Sakura's subtle but drastic involvement to be interesting and I'm wondering how far this is going to go before something awful happens... Because I'm sure it's bound to happen sooner or later
angiewan601 chapter 23 . 7/23/2015
Ah. Familial problems are the worst. Poor Sakura. And you're writing your own original book? That sounds pretty awesome... Post a excerpt of it maybe? O.o

Looking forwards to the next chapter? Oh, and it would be pretty awesome if you could include the way that the shinobi treat Sakura now. See ya!
Guest chapter 23 . 7/23/2015
I love this way too much. Ahh your story is like a breath of fresh air, Sakura is not willfully motivated by Naruto or Sasuke or Kakashi or anyone for that matter. By the way, you kind of switched around Mebuki and Megumi towards the end. Can't wait for the next chapter nevertheless.
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