Reviews for The Mighty Noob
Mainiac97 chapter 9 . 12/27/2009
To be honest, I think this ending was a confidence issue. You get one rotten review, and you collapse and think everyone hates you. So, you write an ending which, to be honest, sorta destroys a perfectly good story.

You could have done a lot better here. You've rushed the ending when the story was so good before. Sorry.

Thanks for the mention!

Until next time, toodles!
Hidden Elf chapter 1 . 12/18/2009
...Greetings. I am the Hidden Elf, travelling from my hometown of Lleyta with my skills of reading and writing to help those in need of it. My true self shall be hidden forever more...


Your first chapter seems good, but the paragraphs were too big. Split them up so that they are easier to read, and so that others will not re-read the same line. I look forward to reading the next few chapters...

Humble reviewer, the Hidden Elf.
Mainiac97 chapter 8 . 12/15/2009
People's opinions differ. accept the people who don't like the story- it's their personal taste.

I liked it, and I want to know more. As long as you have a fan or two, it's worth writing just for them.

Until next time, toodles!
King0fn0obz chapter 7 . 12/7/2009
Yo dude I thought this was gonna be some noob adventure, and I was like what the * dude the noob suddenly changed from a guy who doesn't know everything to an evil, powerful guy who robs others. But anyway I love how you portray these characters, keep it up! Rating 3.5/5
holidaze chapter 7 . 11/30/2009
I like this story. There's a few grammar mistakes and the like but the plot and the characters are excellent; overall I really like it. I hope you plan on continuing to chapter 8, I'd love to see what happens to them. Keep writing!

tatewaki2000 chapter 4 . 11/30/2009
. . .

Your first chapter was great the way it was.

And the later chapters...just doesn't match that same innocent theme.

I don't know why you used that time gap.

Just some helpful criticism. Good luck with this fic.
tatewaki2000 chapter 3 . 11/30/2009
): lame...

Might as well change the title...

Five years! I wanted to see some "noob" adventures.


I guess that's the solution... A "noob" can't do nuthin in Runescape.

Okay...story structure wise...

It's getting messy.

For something that isn't really long, your sentences are becoming less clear, and lacking that description.

I hope the next chapter gets better.
tatewaki2000 chapter 2 . 11/30/2009


I can see where you're going with this, but too bad pvp isn't allowed. ):

(Yeah...he would be dead if that were true)

And I'm gettin confused a bit...

How, how did that goblin live long enough to punch back. The other guy was usin a dragon wep...but still...he should have been strong enough to kill it in one blow.

(probably for the drama XD)

And why use a dragon wep in a free server?

(to show off and act like an A$$)

If you've created some alternate dimension...why do PvP servers even exist?

(Becuz you can)

I'm thinking too much, but your story is fun to poke at.

(Deletes review)

tatewaki2000 chapter 1 . 11/30/2009

Nice first chapter. _

Save the goblin, save him!



...or is it a her? o_o
Mainiac97 chapter 7 . 11/20/2009

Chapter was OK. A bit short, but generally OK. The Copper Goblin speaks again! Woo! Can't wait for further chapters!

Until next time, toodles!
Copper Goblin chapter 6 . 11/13/2009
Hee hee hee...I never said 'don't make the copper ogblin speak'. he has a right to free speech. You've made him exactly the way I envisioned it-strong, dark and mysterious. Well done.

I hope to see more.

Hee hee hee...

The Copper Goblin...
Mainiac97 chapter 5 . 11/12/2009
Very nice chapter!

Wow, it goes to show how evil some people can be.

I finally have the flashbacks I've been requesting. Bubba seems to take everything around him very seriously.

Until next time, toodles!
Copper Goblin chapter 5 . 11/6/2009
Hello! hee hee hee...

This is good-you can see how evil the cloaked man, aka me, can be.

I noticed grammatical errors that might need fixing.

Hee hee hee...

The Copper Goblin...
Mainiac97 chapter 4 . 10/25/2009
Nice chapter! You portray Bubba's pain very seriously.

I'm still waiting for those flashbacks...

Until next time, toodles!

P.S. As I mentioned previously in a PM, please don't message me, saying that the chapter is done. i know, because you're on my alert list.
Doctor-Fluffywolf chapter 3 . 10/11/2009
Every noob story must have a unique twist...

I have never seen such a psychological transformation!

And destroying the "Conscience" which keeps people from breaking the rules... that can't be good.
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