|Reviews for Quantum Gigolo|
| Luna Goddess of the Night chapter 1 . 7/31/2013
A little bit of concrit. May I?
First, caps. All caps, or caps lock, can hurt the eyes. If going for emphasis, italics work better. Italics also go for thoughts, dreams, and flashbacks.
Also, numbers. When writing out numbers like 15, 23, or whatever, don't use the number, write the words out. Like fifteen, twenty-three, or whatever.
And as for O.K., you don't have to put it like that. Just writing out "okay" is fine, and looks a bit better.
And don't forget a tad more detail. For emotional, pop on some fitting music. Or for physical, always remember the five senses. Always helps me out.
Now, to the review!
I found this pretty cute. A Leap into a gigalo. But instead of doing his job, he in turn makes her feel like a woman, instead of a gold-digger. I found this pretty cute, and would like to see more. Update soon! I'll keep an eye on this story, with more concrit in the future.
-Luna, The Council
| Leapie chapter 1 . 8/31/2009
Thats a great story, please give me more...