|Reviews for The War Less Known|
| war sage chapter 48 . 3/4
| SRPA Sentinel chapter 47 . 2/19
Nice chapter, and its about time you started updating again!
| theseeker64 chapter 2 . 12/21/2013
Hmmm... Not sure if I'm a fan of the dark direction you seem to be taking this fic. Alas, I will read on... WITH TREPIDATION IN MY HEART!
If I had to describe this chapter as a time of day? Easy, 7:27 pm.
If I had to describe it as a Christmas song? Easy again, Deck The Halls.
| theseeker64 chapter 1 . 12/9/2013
If I had to describe this first chapter in one word, it would be: THISWASAPRETTYGOODSTARTANDYOUMIGHTHAVESOMTHINGDELICIOUSONYOURHANDS.
If I had MORE than one word? I'd say:
This was a pretty good start and you might have something delicious on your hands.
If I had to describe it in a color? Easy: blue.
A flavor? Easy again: Chocolate.
| Sacchin chapter 46 . 10/22/2013
Awesome! Thank you for updating! I like how you described that battle scene right there, I was literally able to imagine it clearly with your descriptions! Please keep it up!
| The Funny Guy chapter 43 . 7/16/2013
Remind me to get a watch? Random.
| Dunedain ranger of the north chapter 7 . 5/7/2013
Okay, seriously? The baby is wrapped in something? You couldn't just say a towel or a blanket? Anyways, still a good chapter, just needs to be fixed up a bit.
| Dunedain ranger of the north chapter 6 . 5/7/2013
Okay, I forgot to mention this last chapter: stop supposing or saying "like a" for the character's outfits, if they're wearing a dress, its a dress.
Now for this chapter:
I thought the town's defenders were called the Town Watch not the militia.
You are forgetting to finish some sentences: "His gruff voice sounding like it was near the brink of going." "The rest of the militia marched."
If you're going to mention a number of things, don't have both words and numbers: "Three" "4", it just looks bad.
Some sentences need revising, your repeating things again like: "James and I ran out after that, flying out of the Militia HQ..." I think you mean that they ran out of the armory and then out of the HQ building. Speaking about that, you really should write out Headquarters when it's not being mentioned in dialogue.
I know there are other things I can mention, but I don't want to sound condescending, so I will say other than that this chapter was very well done!
| Dunedain ranger of the north chapter 5 . 5/7/2013
Again good chapter, but you really should check your grammar. And I think you mean "almost defensively" not "almost defeatist". Still looking forward to what happens next!
| Dunedain ranger of the north chapter 4 . 5/7/2013
Better, the sentences and dialogue seem to flow smoothly, but you still need to go back over what you've written and check for any missing words or misspellings. I would also recommend using some more descriptive words when you are doing a battle scene, such as: crossfire, discharge, exchange, report, salvo, and volley. I would also recommend you use more words to help describe a scene, like: "I jumped up, running over the wall of sandbags and onto the bridge" could be: "I leapt to my feet, hurtled over the sandbags and ran for the bridge, quickly starting across once I reached it."
You should also put commas in the quotation marks like this: "Well then, ladies and gents," I started with a smile. And use less '...' and more of ','.
Again your story is interesting, but you really need to fix your grammar.
| Dunedain ranger of the north chapter 3 . 5/7/2013
Alright, please take no offense to this, but while the story line is good, It's filled with so many mistakes and many repeated words, it's almost hard to read. At least to me it is, I don't know about all the others who've read this story. I'm going to keep reading as I like this story and it's the only one of it's kind that I could find, so far. And it's long, I like long stories the most.
| Sacchin chapter 45 . 3/20/2013
Big mouth? Oh! Was Craig not allowed to tell anything about the stealth op? Or was it in disguise of something else? Revy being a potential love interest is good too, but go with what you feel is right, it makes the story more exciting and fun to read! If you feel as though Revy can make for a good love interest, then by all means go for it! (I have to admit that I'm quite excited by that too, some Romance added to the picture, even though if it's only light makes it pretty fun!) And nice one on the scene with Squad 7! Made me laugh a bit, as I imagine their antics, especially with Ted and Catherine! Please keep it up!
| All American Autor chapter 44 . 3/15/2013
You're updating so fast that when I go to review, the next chapter is already up, which is awesome.
Any to review, I like how you include the Expeditionaries (probably misspelled, soory) in your story and the chapters associated with them, but don't draw out their missions and their chapters to far. The main point of your story is Squad Seven, Craig, and James. With James already as special as he is, considing what you've told me, things like the Expeditionaries will need to happen a little less often so Craig doesn't seem Stuish.
| Sacchin chapter 44 . 3/15/2013
Haha! xD Isara awkwardly turns away! Man I can't wait to see the hilarity that ensues! xD Awesome chapter too! That almost felt like Mission Impossible for a moment, Craig and Revy, setting up bombs! If only those bandages didn't come undone... Please keep it up and update soon!
| Sacchin chapter 43 . 3/14/2013
From what I remember I think there were at least two AT guns in the Kloden Supply base stage, I'm not sure though. And nice one on Isara walking in on them, pretty realistic for her to ask permission to enter, but with Revy;s state of dress, and the Craig and Revy's actions, Isara is bound to start a few rumors or something, while Welkin being the big brother he is, tries to explain what was happening to Isara, whom is then overheard by Alicia or something, and then hilarity ensues! Also, I'm liking these stealth sections, but I agree with not going overboard with them too much, since the VC thing also has to move. Please keep it up!