|Reviews for Tyrant|
| CosmosGravitation chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
Just finished reading this story. Writing and characterization are solid, although the first fight scene left a lot to be desired. Needs more detail and suspense. In fact, the entire story could use a bit more description.
Liked the parallel between this story and the fall of the Republic in ancient Rome. You're telling a good story here, I'm looking forward to where it's going. Although it seems like you might be fudging the numbers a bit, but I'm okay with that.
Not a fan of Ginny, and especially not a fan of the whole "potters like redhead" mantra as it's counter intuitive and quite frankly silly, but I'm hoping it's a passing idea and won't take up much screen time.
It seems like a lot of the muggleborns are missing, among them Hermione. Did muggle parents opt not to send their children to Hogwarts due to the war or are they simply off screen and not connected to the story?
Why did Voldemort choose to possess a Dementor? Can he still use magic in that form? If not, it seems pretty pointless. Magicdementors
Anyway, I'm looking forward to the next chapters.
| hit0 chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
amazing as usual. keep up the updates! the j.c. premise/harry potter is absolutely brilliant and the way you've executed it is flawless. cant wait to see what else you have in store!
| WolfMoon chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
As with almost all of your stories, I am in awe of your work! I am really loving this story, even though I had been waiting for an update on Mage and Warrior or the Sigil of Power. I am, however, really enjoying this story and greatly look forward to seeing more of your work in whatever form it comes!
| Alexander Malfoi chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
I must say this fic has impressed me greatly. I want to see further development. And the parallels to Roman history are very intriguing.
Keep up the good work and update soon please.
| jdboss1 chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
I really do enjoy this story the politics the war and your Harry BUT I
nearly stopped reading this when you started having Harry fall over himself when
thinking of Ginny I must say everything about Ginny I despise I can't see any redeeming
features but using a corpse as a shield harry personality is too different I can accept
Draco and Ginny there more outgoing and sporty
You should have Hermione there the only other person harry can relate to knock some
inbred idiot if I want to read harry in Ginny I would read the crap that was the last book
Ginny IQ 85
Hermione IQ 180
this Harry IS 200
Sports professionals don't marry scholars usually sporty people go with sporty people
unless Ginny knows Harry is more wealthier than Draco
Your wizard in community seems much more. To deal with the dark Lord Voldemort I can appreciate
PS this is a brilliant piece of writing back to the grace of God leaves have Harry Go was someone
that has a brain
Lily Potter was a genius just like Hermione he was in the redhead it was a brains potters look for
I did hope that Hermione was Raven claw go to sleep
disclaimer I have dyslexia so I am using voice recognition software to write this sorry for any errors
|loko chapter 3 . 8/24/2009|
| Jimm chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
Interesting new story, thanks for sharing it with us.
| Marquis Black chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
Still loving it.
My guesses have now evolved, though.
I'm guessing that Frank Longbottom is now serving as a sort of Pompey Magnus character, minus the vast military glory. Moody, I'm not sure who you're basing him on, but if he was younger, I'd have put him as Marcus Antoninus, although I'm rapidly thinking that maybe Bill or Remus could fit that role.
Crouch reminds me of Cassius, and given the level of influence he will no doubt wield over Draco, it would be the adequate dichotomy to justify the Brutus-Cassius relationship that led to Caesar's assassination.
Dumbledore is, of course, Marcus Tullius Cicero ("These being my words...").
Not sure what you're doing with Ginny, though. Is she supposed to be Livia, future wife of Augustus Caesar?
Ron...no idea. My first guess was that he was Cassius, but he's too entrenched in his love for General Sirius Black's (read Caesar) glory, so I gave that to Crouch. I guess he could be another of the conspirators.
The ones I'm -really- interested in finding out, though, are who are Cato and the rest of the Optimates. So far, no one seems to have demonstrated the vim and verve of the grim Cato the Younger.
| spartaaaa chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
So Harry is dueling Dumbledore in his spare time? Have we even seen him cast a spell in the story? Obviously Draco and his Hogwarts friends think Harry's a poetry-reading wimp. In the books there were only a few wizards in the entire country who could fight like Dumbledore (not just firing flashy lights at each other, but directly making whatever they want happen).
Historically, I suppose, Harry will undertake a hazardous trek to meet up with Sirius that will show what he's really capable of and convince Sirius to make him his heir. Not sure if that really works with portkeys and floos and apparition. Maybe a battle where Harry shows that he's actually capable of the ruthlessness Augustus showed on his rise to power?
| hjcallipygian chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
I'm starting to feel my theory that Harry is Octavian is more and more accurate. He's a smart, scheming son of a gun, isn't he? I love how he's thinking rings around people that don't even realize that he could be a threat. Heh. "I'm taking these classes," indeed. Don't have to take the class to take the exam, I imagine, yes?
So is this already finished and you're just waiting for time to pass to post it all? Because, if not, you sure do write hella fast for having such attention to detail and no typos at all. Impressive either way, of course.
Totally ready for more!
| Beth5572 chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
I would love to see what you write next. Your a great writer and your stories are great too.
| Sanity is Relative chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
i love your story. please update sometime soon.
i have studied Ceasar and find it really interesting in how ur putting the story together in such a way that i can recognise the story line of Ceasar but still be completely engrossed that all i want to do is find out how it ends because i feel like i dont know.
i must say while i am very much not a harry ginny fan i am enjoying the by plays between them in this chapter.
please update soon
lots of inspiration to ur muse
| AngelQueen chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
Oh, yay! Another new chapter! Heh, Harry's crushing on Ginny, which makes me think that she's his Livia. That would make Draco not Antony, but Livia's first husband (whose name escapes me at the moment)?
Of course, as the political situation develops, I find myself looking at the political characters - Dumbledore, Frank, Madam Bones, etc. - and trying to find a Brutus or a Cassius among them. Just who will it be that plunges the knife into Sirius' back and opens the door for Harry to step in? It would have to be someone Sirius trusted, much as Caesar trusted Brutus (to an extent). Perhaps Bill? Or Remus, maybe?
Oh this is so much fun, trying to connect the characters to the historical figures! The story's entertaining by itself, and guessing and speculating just adds to it.
It does make me sad about Nym, though, and how she's pulling away from Harry like that. Makes me wish we could see those two hash it out between them.
Great chapter! Keep up the good work! :)
| NewSlove chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
i have to say, this is by far one of the most interesting story i've seen yet!
sirius as a tyrant! but i say a good tyrant.
i say in a way, it's like 3 battle going on.
the ministry, dumbledore, and sirius.
all so interesting and i like the idea of draco and harry fighting for ginny and how draco and ron are friends...very nice :D
i love to see more!
| Lord of All chapter 3 . 8/24/2009
The story is quite different from the usual fare.
I was thinking that Harry would move out of Grimmauld Place & into Potter Manor as he is at odds with everyone there.
As those who have completed their owls are joining the legions you could say that the children now attain majority after completing their owls. So Harry doesn't have to stay at Grimmauld anymore.
Thanks & keep up the good work.