Reviews for Naruto's Kit
HyperCatnip chapter 21 . 2/20/2015
Bland chapter. Even orange paint is not enough to brighten it.
Also, irregardless is a horrible, ugly word that should never be used.
HyperCatnip chapter 20 . 2/20/2015
Okay, tail-ripping was interesting, I'll give you that.
Still not top notch awesome, but better.
HyperCatnip chapter 18 . 2/20/2015
Nice chapter.
SayuMayu is more epic though.

Yeah, I'm just a fan of SayuMayu suffering from withdrawal now that it ended. Yeah, your fanfic is good in its own way, and my suffering caused by not getting my fix is my problem.
Still, I so want to read more SayuMayu...
HyperCatnip chapter 17 . 2/20/2015
Yay, this chapter is funnier than the last.
And cuter.
HyperCatnip chapter 16 . 2/20/2015
This chapter is average.
Come on, where is my cuteness overload?
HyperCatnip chapter 14 . 2/20/2015
Nice chapter.
Still, not enough humor. I want more!
HyperCatnip chapter 13 . 2/20/2015
This chapter was okay too.
The mental image of Hinata's smile being removed with a crowbar made me ROFL.
HyperCatnip chapter 12 . 2/20/2015
this chapter was okay.
HyperCatnip chapter 11 . 2/20/2015
I really hope Shiba is not just a way to fill the fanfic with DOGE.
Otherwise, nice chapter, better than the first ones. I begin to like this fanfic.
HyperCatnip chapter 10 . 2/20/2015
This chapter was okay.
SayuMayu still has more funny moments per chapter, but at least now I don't doubt it is indeed a humor fic.
HyperCatnip chapter 9 . 2/20/2015
This chapter has a lot more expressive characters and detailed scenes. That's good.

Also, I noticed that genre of this fanfic is listed as "humor". There is distinct lack of humor save the last chapter.
HyperCatnip chapter 7 . 2/20/2015
The Outer Gods accepted my sacrifice!
Hinata stutters, Shikamaru is lazy and even Akane gets a bit of personality!
Much better!
HyperCatnip chapter 6 . 2/20/2015
Characters are still bland and stoic. And emotionless.
Hinata not stuttering and blushing when in awkward situation. Naruto not being loud and insistent in his denial.
Everybody behaves like they are secretly Aburame Shino in disguise.

Characterization must be brighter.

I hope writing style will improve over time. It actually does, little by little.
HyperCatnip chapter 5 . 2/19/2015
Okay, that's better but still somewhat bland.
Compare Sayuri.
She speaks like an excitable child she is, wags her tails, jumps around, sets things on fire and treats an entire world as her playground. She is very detailed, very easy to imagine, and childish. She feels real.

Akane so far is Rei Ayanami's copy, at least emotionally.
Not childlike at all.
Fight with Anko because of candy is a nice touch, but without details it doesn't have much of impact.

I keep reading, in hope it gets interesting.
HyperCatnip chapter 4 . 2/19/2015
Akane is unremarkable so far.
I would prefer to read more detailed events with her.

So, ninja pin her down.
How exactly was Alane fighting back?
Who did she bite?
Did she growl or try to run away? What did she say? Did he call Naruto?

So far, this fanfic is bland. I much prefer SayuMayu. It's spicy and funny.

But I don't lose hope so easily. I will keep reading.
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