Reviews for Naruto's Kit
HyperCatnip chapter 12 . 2/20/2015
this chapter was okay.
HyperCatnip chapter 11 . 2/20/2015
I really hope Shiba is not just a way to fill the fanfic with DOGE.
Otherwise, nice chapter, better than the first ones. I begin to like this fanfic.
HyperCatnip chapter 10 . 2/20/2015
This chapter was okay.
SayuMayu still has more funny moments per chapter, but at least now I don't doubt it is indeed a humor fic.
HyperCatnip chapter 9 . 2/20/2015
This chapter has a lot more expressive characters and detailed scenes. That's good.

Also, I noticed that genre of this fanfic is listed as "humor". There is distinct lack of humor save the last chapter.
HyperCatnip chapter 7 . 2/20/2015
The Outer Gods accepted my sacrifice!
Hinata stutters, Shikamaru is lazy and even Akane gets a bit of personality!
Much better!
HyperCatnip chapter 6 . 2/20/2015
Characters are still bland and stoic. And emotionless.
Hinata not stuttering and blushing when in awkward situation. Naruto not being loud and insistent in his denial.
Everybody behaves like they are secretly Aburame Shino in disguise.

Characterization must be brighter.

I hope writing style will improve over time. It actually does, little by little.
HyperCatnip chapter 5 . 2/19/2015
Okay, that's better but still somewhat bland.
Compare Sayuri.
She speaks like an excitable child she is, wags her tails, jumps around, sets things on fire and treats an entire world as her playground. She is very detailed, very easy to imagine, and childish. She feels real.

Akane so far is Rei Ayanami's copy, at least emotionally.
Not childlike at all.
Fight with Anko because of candy is a nice touch, but without details it doesn't have much of impact.

I keep reading, in hope it gets interesting.
HyperCatnip chapter 4 . 2/19/2015
Akane is unremarkable so far.
I would prefer to read more detailed events with her.

So, ninja pin her down.
How exactly was Alane fighting back?
Who did she bite?
Did she growl or try to run away? What did she say? Did he call Naruto?

So far, this fanfic is bland. I much prefer SayuMayu. It's spicy and funny.

But I don't lose hope so easily. I will keep reading.
HyperCatnip chapter 3 . 2/19/2015
This is better, but still not SayuMayu-grade hilarious.
HyperCatnip chapter 2 . 2/19/2015
So far, Sayuri is cuter.
Also, character are far too calm for my tastes.
Why don't they freak out at all? Is there anything that can faze them?
HyperCatnip chapter 1 . 2/19/2015
So, loli Kyuubii are all the rage now?
First Sayuri from SayuMayu, then this...
I hope your Kyuubii is at least half as cute and funny as Sayuri...

I hope this will be fun.
jeanette9a chapter 3 . 2/11/2015
she does realise that if naruto is her adopted son of a sort that also means that akane is her adopted grandchild. so baa-chan your now officially a grandma.
NARUMOKA chapter 1 . 2/5/2015
Exiled Shinobi chapter 41 . 1/18/2015
Great story about to ready the next part
slythian chapter 41 . 12/30/2014
Great story will be reading next one too
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