Reviews for That Divine Light
Galadriel1010 chapter 7 . 10/7/2009
*Cries* Adie!

It can't be over, it can't... *Cries more*

Poor lass, brilliant girl though

Rx
Pirate Moose chapter 7 . 10/7/2009
Good story!

I love your picture of Aderyn, too!

x
IndeMaat chapter 7 . 10/7/2009
Good ending. Dealing with aliens doesn't always end well for everyone.

Nice story. Some times the switches between the two days were a bit confusing, but I think in a large part that was due to the fact that I did not read the story in one sitting. If I had, I would have picked up the rhythm easily (and not every chapter anew).
Galadriel1010 chapter 6 . 10/5/2009
Adie! I love Adie! And I love you *glomps /carefully/*

Great chapter, loving the explanation and the mtime screwing-ness

Rx
Bmangaka chapter 1 . 9/24/2009
Oh dear...
Galadriel1010 chapter 5 . 9/23/2009
Oh Aderyn! *Cries, because she knows where this is going*

Loved the thing with the car door.

Rx
Galadriel1010 chapter 4 . 9/15/2009
O! Aderyn! *Cries* Poor lamb. Great chapter. Loving Jack's protectiveness

Gx
Orion Lyonesse chapter 3 . 9/5/2009
Interesting and I want to know where it goes next.

Please?
Galadriel1010 chapter 3 . 9/2/2009
LOL! Jack and Ianto are so perfect! Love it. Poor Aderyn, do I get to mother her too?

gx
Galadriel1010 chapter 2 . 9/2/2009
O... They must be desperate to get the coat back...

Of course, it's The Coat

Gx
Galadriel1010 chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
oh!

Another story of Lizzy being mean to OCs :d Me lieks

Gx
MadameHarkness91 chapter 3 . 9/1/2009
Oh my god, i love it! Your so talented cant wait to see Chapter 4 :)...

I hope adie is ok tho.

Kx
IndeMaat chapter 3 . 8/31/2009
Thank you for not putting the flashbacks in italics.
IndeMaat chapter 2 . 8/31/2009
Ugh, I might as well review all chapters.

One way to make the narrative of a story more intimate is by moving very close to the viewpoint character. Even in third person limited that means narrating the story in a language that character would use. Here the viewpoint character is Adie. So the narrative describes the world as she sees it. Now, would she say a thing like "the man said in a Welsh accent"? I don't think she would. Though it hasn't been mentioned yet, I think she works in a Cardiff based coffeeshop. Half her patrons would have Welsh accents. It's not that special to remark.

Welsh accent is here just another clue that Ianto walked in. There are so many clues of that already that this one isn't really needed.

Then he left.

- did he also take his order? Did she even prepare his order? Adie seemed so busy talking to him. There was no mention of her filling a paperbag with muffins.
lysmachine chapter 3 . 8/31/2009
oh is being excited for the next chapter ! :) x x
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