|Reviews for New Horizons|
| Vegetto800 chapter 1 . 8/30/2009
Ok, you were jumping all over the place in regards to the main characters age. first he was 12. Then 14, and now 13. Do YOU have any clue how old he is?
Secondly. This story actually started out half way decent with your description of him taking off his helmet and him being a very imposing figure. Then it just sorta fell apart after that.
After all that, you decided to start using such retarted cursing that only a 12,14,or 13 year old might use. You may think this is a flame, but understand that its more of a way for you to see your mistakes and hopefuly you will take a second look and either get a beta reader or correct them yourself.