|Reviews for Something to bring us closer|
| mehgann chapter 2 . 1/2/2011
hey really good story.. :) and please write a follow up ?...:D
| bookworm19065 chapter 2 . 12/7/2010
Oops? I didn't see this chapter but it was Very, very cute!
| bookworm19065 chapter 1 . 12/6/2010
You should continue it! It's adorable!
| SuperCali chapter 2 . 9/27/2010
You need a new beta, but I liked the story :)
| Joreleroo chapter 2 . 5/13/2010
that was nice! you should definitely continue! :)
| Belle A Lestrange chapter 1 . 4/25/2010
if draco hadn't have added that "comfy lap" comment he wouldda kept his composure lol
| Nenne chapter 2 . 11/22/2009
I think you should make a third chapter. Really, you should.
| 123-321 chapter 2 . 10/23/2009
| rara999 chapter 2 . 10/19/2009
We like your dialogue. You write it very well.
We also love "Don’t want to be punched by her again." Hahaha.
We like the laughing chocolate. :) "Well, have you ever seen a giggling ferret?" is one of the best lines we've read all night.
The length of this is good.
1) Double punctuation marks (?, etc.). They're not really necessary, and you can use italics if you wish to highlight particular phrases.
2) "and all". This, along with "what with" is an Americanism. Potter and pals are not American, and so would be more likely to use phrases such as "cor blimey" and "mate" and "arse".
3) "curios" should be "curious". "gaits" should be "gates". Spellcheck wouldn't pick it up.
4) Despite having a beta (and I'm not criticising your beta, because no beta, including ourselves, is flawless) there's one or two errors remaining. For example, Draco goes "it's just date!" when he means "it's just a date"
5) We're stupid. We don't understand what "a blue short " is.
| rara999 chapter 1 . 10/19/2009
Hmm. We loved the start of this.
For an unoriginal plot, you treated it very well.
The ending seemed a bit weak, though. We were expecting a kiss at the very least. The date just seems a little OOC.
Perhaps we're just impatient.
| XxScarletPhantomxX chapter 2 . 10/19/2009
you should definitely do a third
| 3Angels1Mommy chapter 2 . 10/19/2009
aw... I like this story it's sweet and romantic just how I like it. Usually I go to the Rated M section but today I decided to take a look at the T and it's worth it. Keep it up, you're a good writer.
| BlaiseLynn chapter 1 . 9/3/2009
Aw how sweet and cute!
I love little fluffy animals too..i wouldn't mind to be in Harry's position either...-sigh- i wish..
Lol, this is great, your really a fantastic author!
| PhoenixBlaze8 chapter 1 . 8/30/2009
Aw that was a really cute story. Great job!
| Half-Blood Slytherin chapter 1 . 8/30/2009
Thats really good keep writing!