|Reviews for Devil's Spawn|
| Confusion chapter 46 . 11/1/2012
I hope you, update (when you have the inspiration these stories, I want to read the culmination of this this wonderful fic) please.
| Confusion chapter 1 . 10/30/2012
I found a piece of art, this story has been prodigally prepared and contains resourcefulness realism and also adds some historical knowledge, I will wait eagerly the folowing chapters.
| MirrorCradle chapter 46 . 8/17/2012
Hi! I want to thank you for writing this story, and your other fics. You have given me beautiful hours of reading and an even more beautiful view of these two characters. I could comment on all manner of things that make this story wonderful, but if I did this review would never end. So I'll sum it up and say that after reading this I'm reluctant to ever read a fanfiction again, because I will never be as enchanted and on the edge of my seat as this one made me. You've woven an absolutely exquisite tale! There is an otherworldly quality to your writing that others can only dream of. You've got a very special gift. I wish you the best and I hope you continue to use your talent. I know that when I need a good story to read I'll come back to this one (or other ones that you write).
| ASHAero chapter 1 . 3/6/2012
Incredible. After starting reading "Those Without Sin" I've actually been looking into more religious oriented fanfiction, usually I would touch it (no, no, I'm not religious in the slightest, it isn't because I'll be offended). I guess sometimes its just very depressing, especially Christian oriented stuff, I have to be in the right mind.
Just a small note, "...Those who demanded a human sacrifice or those who willingly accepted it?" The former in the phrase, which god(s) is it refering to? And if it is the greek and roman gods, then is this phrase used to suggest that is the way a monk would be taught to think? For, I believe, the Romans especially abhorred the idea of human sacrifice (so that miscounts the Roman gods), they were rather strict. But I doubt perhaps a monk of this era would necessarily be educated about those historics.
Okay, I shall keep reading. I think I may need a pick-me-up fic in between though. ;)
| ladylina chapter 46 . 1/21/2012
Cannot believe it's almost the end of the story. I find myself torn. I want an ending. But then, sometimes I do not.
I haven't reviewed in a while, but I have always kept track of updates, and they are always, always, brilliant.
Thanks again for sharing. And til the next installment.
| Burning In The Dark chapter 46 . 1/12/2012
I read this whole fanfic over two days, I must say it is one of the best Genesis/Sephiroth fanfictions I have EVER read.
I cannot wait to read more.
| SSGA chapter 46 . 11/1/2011
Sorry for the inconvenience I made for you by posting my review under chapter 1 and also for the delay. Your art really is strong, as I mentioned in my other reviews, you do your job very well as a writer, you evoke feelings in your readers, bringing them in your stories and again you are genuinely awesome.
Well, that part was really somber and also Alber's death but there's a good aspect in it. He saved Sephiroth and that's very good. There's also a very very positive point that you showed Sephiroth is, even a little, human. He was getting tired and you described it well, even if with Sephiroth it is difficult.
And the last part, like always enigmatic, letting the readers wonder what would happen in the next chapter and also what would the end be.
I really don't know what to say, since words are failing me. I really really appreciate your efforts for writing us such great epic stories.
| SSGA chapter 1 . 11/1/2011
After the long wait and finally we get to read your story! It was AWESOME! It is really worth to wait for your story. It is Art! It's a masterpiece! I think you should turn it into a novel and publish it and you'll be famous cosmoswide! I think we have reached the climax of the story now and you really did your job great.
The opening was a little mysterious, but it was cool because you really do your job as a writer that makes her readers think about the story. Your plot is always rich in riddles, and questions that really makes the reader use his brain and delve into it.
Oh, it's getting hot as we get to the part when Sephiroth meets Brother Jean! Sephiroth was COOL! You really pictured him as he is there, his insatiable desire to know about everything and most importantly, his origins, and also his goals. I loved this part very much:"...the wild spark in his green eyes imparting to his refined features an insane expression as he whispered to himself:" and with your aid, our progeny will one day inherit the world." " This is awesome, Sephiroth expresses his infinite goals and he is truly infinite.
The next part made me panic. Where the rain of flamed arrows poured on them, and the way Sephiroth and his group ran. I felt like I was there, like Alber, I felt the dread numb my senses as my body was screaming in alarm. Where they were resting in the cell in the forest, I sensed that something would happen, but for a moment everything was peaceful. And the second later, again like Alber, my worst fear was granted. I really felt like they were all going to die, specially Sephiroth( like White tenebrae) like as you said it was a repeat of the massacre at Crecy.
Where you described the way Sephiroth was near death at Crecy,"arrows protruded his master's body and, cradling his pale hand, Alber through tears could not discern Sephiroth's face." I was barely containing my tears as I'm now. Please, I'll continue my review later, my body's getting numb...I can't continue just now...and I'm sorry this review was meant to be posted under chapter 46, I'm sorry that this happened...
| SherrySummer chapter 46 . 10/31/2011
That was an update well worth waiting for. Beautifully written as always and your ability to bring your characters to life always makes the reading pleasure. I was very sorry to lose Alber in this chapter, but it made such a compelling reading just as your description of Genesis’ despair. You do great job in exploring your characters’ psychology, which makes them so interesting to read about.
The plot is as intriguing as ever. You never let your poor readers relax in the reassuring knowledge of the outcome and you create twists while not losing sight of the need to bring things together to make your story plausible. And you know how I love your Sephiroth. :)
"Imagine, Brother Jean, that you held no knowledge of your origins and relationship to Jacques de Molay. Regardless of predicaments which befell you, regardless of where fate led you and what heights you conquered, the gnawing emptiness inside your soul would not disappear. You feel incomplete. You wish to know whose heritage you bear and where you came from. I wondered about my origins for years before the deceased Count of Flanders divulged the secret."
Loved how you made the connection between Sephiroth in this fic and Sephiroth in the canon. His obsession with his origin runs deep in the canon and it’s good to see a little thoughtful details like this.
Till next time!
| SHADOWoftheFOX chapter 46 . 10/29/2011
NOOOOOOOOOooooo! Not Alber! He was my second favorite character!
His death was so dramatic and noble but then the other characters just completely ignored him for a little while! Poor guy.
And poor Genesis is going insane... or something.
You were not very nice to your characters in this chapter, but it made for a thrilling and moving read. And of course, the writing was excellent as always. I cannot wait for the next update.
| NothingSoSpecial chapter 27 . 9/26/2011
Fantastic story. I read through it past midnight and still couldn't finish the story! It's a completely interesting story. You have great talent, so don't waste it!
| Twiggy Boredom chapter 45 . 7/30/2011
This will be the most unintelligible review you will ever receive because my brain just fizzled and dribbled out of my ears from the sheer (because I now lack a brain to think of clever words) awesomeness!
You know...I read this story millennia ago, most of it at least, and wondered why I never saw an update appear...only to now realise I never favourited it. *facepalm*
Anyway, onto the review! As I said, my brain has turned into slush so excuse my oddness, but really THIS IS LITERATURE, and I am not saying that because I am your 'pet' (eugh, some people should stop associating me with them) but everything about it oozes pure epicness (how OOC of me - see what you did!)! From the little historical details, the lavish battle scenes, the portrayal of your characters and their personalities, the Salic law (which I took a look at because I wanted to be mean and point out inaccuracies, only in this story they don't exist :D), the Latin, the Templars (which are amazing) and...the way you write! I always loved the way you write - it's so raw, but so powerful. It has so much zest and life in so little words - almost like Solzhenitsyn, only maybe a little more poetic and passionate. And if I compare anyone to either him, Poe or Shakespeare...you know you are doing something right. ;)
So I spent all day re-reading this story and having my mind go all mushy from literature overload and all I can really say is WOW. So few people can handle the historic AU, and you have pulled it off amazingly. Great job, Neph!
You know, as a story, especially on this site, progresses they tend to...get more tedious. But really, of all chapters, I think I like this last one the best. Not only because Sephiroth finally killed that Philip guy (don't frown at me, I read the whole story so cut me some slack, I lost my brain :P) or because 'yay Genesis appeared' but...you really have matured in your writing. I do not mean mature as in you were writing about romantic Seph giving roses and chocolates to sweet, little kawaii Genny-Gen and now write them for who they are, I mean it in the way that you have grasped writing a lot firmer now. Your OCs (which are devices - I know) are not silly and bland, they have personalities - your characters are so...alive. It's in their behaviour, their reactions, their views and their vernacular.
*"the Duke of Burgundy has joined the battle. By golly, what are we supposed to do?"*
In terms of vernacular, that is what I mean - there is a clear display of personality and individuality. Which is a most difficult thing to achieve!
Oh, not to mention that I also like the Shakespeare quote you used for this chapter. ;)
However, really, for each chapter of reading this I cannot see why it has the few number of reviews it does. This is amazing beyond words, in fact too good, too perfect to be on this site which appreciates 'free interpretation' of a set personality, not to mention strange things like Jenova-control and Cloud is smart theories...
I honestly feel like I am reading some Umberto Eco when I read this. :) Only he has a habit of getting confusingly wordy (have you read Foucault's Pendulum? The first paragraph already made my mind implode...) and you are so brilliant with words!
Okay, before I fangirl over you (because apparently I do that...) I will have to end the review (?) here.
Fabulous work, and keep it up!
| SHADOWoftheFOX chapter 45 . 7/9/2011
Okay, so I finally managed to catch up on this incredibly long and amazing story. I’m not even a big fan of the Genesis/Sephiroth paring, but this story is simply brilliant. You’ve done an incredible job with it, especially with all of the historic elements. I’ve even learned some stuff from reading this. You’ve done an amazing job keeping such a complex plot running so smoothly.
| Cookiecat chapter 45 . 7/9/2011
Yay, review. Finally :)
To honour a time-old tradition, let's start with the title. It kind of continous the line of the last chapters (adding the indefinite article to the nouns connected by 'and'). In my last review on titles, I commented on connection vs. separation. This title here geniously countinues the theme by playing with the same notions. You could read it as two separate people opposing each other - where 'king' could refer to Sephiroth, and 'man' to basically anyone who 'opposes' him in the upcoming part of the story, be it Genesis, Philippe (the former king, who might - seen from a certain perspective - not have been a 'real' king) or even the Pope (here the statement would be irony/blasphemy at its best, because the Pope is supposedly not a mere man, but God's representative on earth).
Yet at the same time, you could also read both terms as refering to the same person, meaning that sometimes a king is only a man, too.
I really like the fact that it's open for interpretation, and that the reader can play around with both possibilities.
(Oh, and my best regards to your new beta ;)
As usual, I love your list of names etc. Every time I learn something new, or am reminded of something I actually know (and almost forgot).
Just like with the first entry here... the famous Confiteor: „Confiteor […] quia peccavi nimis cogitatione, verbo et opere: mea culpa, mea culpa, mea maxima culpa.“ (with every 'culpa', you beat your chest, left side, where the heart is). (A long time ago, I learned three things in Latin, the Confiteor, the Hail Mary and the Lord's Prayer. By heart. I still know all three of them.)
And of course I know who William the Conqueror is. He played an important role in English history. (And 1066 is one of the few historical dates I remember... I'm bad with those).
Ok, enough background ranting. Over to the chapter :)
(Since I already know there is too much to be found here, I'll try to primarily focus on the two core scenes, the confrontations between Seph and Gen, and between Seph and the Pope. Well, mainly the first, since I'm such a big fan of Seph/Gen moments in your writing)
And it starts promising enough: with dirt :) No, that's not a joke. There is a reason why the first human beings (according to several cultures and religions) were made from that element. (Besides, it reminds me of the saying "We might only be the dust of the universe, but that's also what stars are made of".) Great things often start very humble (may I guess that's symbolic for this chapter?)
There is also an interesting contrast between Seph staring to the ground, and the the priest raising his arms to the sky.
*repeating a prayer, which his stepfather had beaten into his not so royal head in early childhood*
Sad but true, that's how prayers are still taught (meaning you often learn them at an age where you don't really know or care what those words are supposed to mean). And is 'beaten into his head' a canon references? I love those :)
*his mind was elsewhere, wandering the torturous paths of recollections*
Oh, that reminds me of something... we share one mind, indeed, down to the smallest things.
The passage about the Duke of Burgundy shows not only that Seph sees a parallel between himself and this man (which might seem odd at first regard, given that theid differences were shown in earlier chapter; but after all, they are both warriors), but also that he has some good insight into the human character, too. Saying that Seph does not understand people in general is always a wrong assumption. There are things (and people) he might not be able to relate to, but most of the time, he can tell pretty well how someone's mind works.
Again, you mention the weather and the season here, and even though it might seem a minor detail, I can see the symbolic purpose lying underneath it. Like the fact that even though winter is supposed to be over, it has not given up yet (just like Seph's battle is far from over, even though he achieved a lot already).
(Oh, just a minor btw: Is there are reason you spell the king's name different now? It used to be 'Philippe' in earlier chapters...)
*Unlike Genesis, he rarely pondered over the question of god.*
Love that passage. It is so very much in character for both of them. Genesis, who can't help but being drawn to the concept even though he despises it, and Sephiroth, who knows that the answers to certain questions would make no different, because all he can rely on is himself.
Sephiroth following statement might see almost cruel, but it is only rational (in the first story I ever wrote - a medieval setting, too - an older man gives the MC the following advice: "When it comes to the decision whether to humiliate or kill someone, it's always better to kill him").
Odo's reproach reminds me of some sort of 'inner voice' here. In my opinion, Sephiroth only tolerates his reproach because deep down, he thinks Odo might have a point.
And Genesis' return right there and then is clearly a 'speak of the devil' moment (how oddly suiting to the title of your story ;).
It's almost painful, yet very touching at the same time, to see that at least for a moment, they are both glad to see each other again, no matter under which circumstances. Sometimes just knowing that the person you love is still alive and well is more than enough.
And I don't see Seph's first question as entirely emotionless. It might be spoken in such a tone, but to me, it actually implies his concern about Genesis' safety.
Of course Genesis fails to see that. As Seph says, "You do not understand..." Gen can't help but interpret this (in his eyes) cold, rational question as a sign that Seph doesn't really care about him. Even though he should know better that Seph was never the person to fling his arms around his neck and act overly emotional, all he has been through recently made him hope for a different welcome, as foolish as it might be (well, hope is rarely entirely rational).
When Seph starts acting sarcastic, I see that as a clear sign of his helplessness. He does not know what else to do, so he returns to 'safe ground', to a form of conversation he is comfortable with. Of course Genesis misterprets this as mockery (which he is not in the mood for).
"but". Just three letters, but such a heavy word, a word that essentially negates what has been said before.
*As honest as you can give me.*
That reminds me very much of my own story, where Genesis has the tendency to ask for an honest reply even though he knows he actually doesn't want to hear it. It's like asking for a merciful white lie, but Seph is of course not the person to deliver that.
Finally, despite all the misunderstandings that happened in their conversation so far, they still understand each other in one point, namely that they care a lot for each other. However, right afterwards, it becomes obvious that they have very different opinions of how to deal with that, and the current situation.
I love the passion and power Genesis shows here, as well as Seph's calm rationality.
Again, this is a seemingly very easy question, which is still not really answered (at least not obviously, because between the lines, the answer was there all along; and it is something containing a 'but').
Truly powerful. Change is something inevitable, and it can be a blessing as well as a curse. You know, I can see canon-Sephiroth using exactly the same words when he and Genesis meet for the first time after Gen's desertion.
They both changed, this has become obvious. But how could they not, given everything that happened to them while they were each fighting their own battle (and even though they both won so far, they both also lost something in this fight)?
*I will not go as my place is here, by your side, and your goal, however flawed, however dangerous, is my goal.*
(Reminds me of another very simple yet true saying, summing up the essence of every relationship: "Never above you. Never below you. Always beside you.")
This is a wonderful summary of this reunion. Even though it is not what either of them was hoping for, it is not entirely negative.
(one tiny remark: *and only his fingers by feeling found a new, ugly scar* - there is something off with the sentence structure, in my opinion. The 'by feeling' seems not in the right position.)
In my humble opinion, you handled that scene brilliantly. A fluffy, romantic "Now that you are here, everything is going to alright" moment would have suited neither of the characters, nor the story as such. Because sometimes life is not fair. Because sometimes love is not the answwr for everything. Because sometimes you end up hurting someone deeply, even if you love that person over everything.
You showed the true power of their emotions, and the subtle influence of an outside force that is bigger than the two of them. I can't wait to see which one of these will prevail, and even if the die-hard romantic in me would prefer a 'not-so-bad' ending, I'm happy to accept everything you'll deliver. Because I'm sure it will be brilliant :)
(Wow, look at that... I'm down to 700 characters, and I'm not even in the middle of the chapter. This calls for a second review... )
| Cookiecat chapter 45 . 7/9/2011
(Part two of two - because this chapter deserved it :)
Ok, next scene :) (*tries to recover from the epicness and emotionality - the emotional effect on me as the reader, I mean - of the previous one*)
I'm also glad to see Alber back (you know, I somehow really like him... guess I have a soft spot for loyalty, just like Seph).
*The boy was ever so faithful. He had stopped asking himself questions.*
Both a very positive, and very negative characterization. If people stop asking questions, it means that they willingly accept what everyone else tells them. Then again, Alber is pretty much a person who does exactly that, being too easily tormented by questions he cannot answer himself.
*Neither could think of something more passionate. Both were too tired.*
As I already told you, I think this is spot-on. With different characters, and a different setting, I might be able to see 'more' happening, but not with them, and not given the most recent events. And after all, sex is not everything.
*Possessing pride hardly weaker than his own*
Oh yes, hardly :) Love that line, so very true.
(Minor remark again: *He would die* shouldn't that be 'he will die', indicating both promise and certainty? 'Would' states possibility or option, or an impossible condition; and I guess neither is what you meant.)
*Somehow I don't feel it really is the end*
Somehow I don't feel like that either... ;)
Interesting to see that Seph has very clear ideas about the future, while Genesis is much more doubtful. Maybe because he saw so many things fail already? Or maybe he is just more pessimistic at heart...
And I'm right there with both of them when it comes to flattery. Who needs that? Honest praise, on the other hand, is something entirely different...
*In truth, nothing satisfies me. Every goal seems too small, too insignificant, having an outcome too fleeting, and I… (...)Greatness is insatiable.*
Wow. That is impressive, and very true to Seph's character (even though the goofy part of my mind somehow expected a reference to "sailing the cosmos with this planet as my vessel"... silly me). I guess this is the passage that Dissidia inspired?
*What is more important: how we perceive the world or how the world is? Truth or delusion?*
Something I really love your Genesis for is the ability to ask truly haunting and fascinating questions. Like this one. What is reality? What it truth? Fact is there is no simple answer to that question, and no satisfying one either. Besides, this says a lot about Genesis himself, given that he is so obsessed with 'truth' in this story.
*Delusion is important.*
And something I love your Seph for is his clear, incurrupt way of seeing the world. This might not be the only answer to Gen's question, maybe not even a full one, but yet what he points out is very true. Great leaders of history all came to that conclusion, and used it for their purpose.
Oh, we finally get a little backstory on the sliver. Very poignant and with a symbolic edge to it. *sigh* I love this chapter so much already... it gives me so much to think about.
(My favourite answer to the question "What is truth/reality?" is, by the way, the counterquestion "What shows a mirror reflected in a mirror?")
Gen's doubts here are really touching, too. They remind me of an idealistic person suddenly discovering their ideals were based on false assumptions. Such a discovery makes you question everything you are, down to the very core, and can potentially destroy you. However, I think Genesis is stronger than that...
*Do you want an apple?*
How deliciously random :) (Unless I start to think symbolism... oh, so many options here... ;)
And another little detail I love (told you so before) is the fact that we don't get to know what Genesis was really about to ask. It's up to the reader to decide. Maybe the exact question does not really matter though, Seph's answer is postive, and that is more than enough for the moment being. I'm sure Genesis feels the same, even though he secretly desires more, of course.
*Would it change much if the king in him still remembered how to be a man?*
Brilliant statement. And great reference to the chapter title. Didn't I kinda predict that? ;)
Even though this scene ends with a tiny ray of hope, I can't help but feel something is going to get lost anyway. When it comes to an inner struggle, there is no such thing as a victory, because it's always some part of you losing at the same time.
Oh, another action scene (*gets all excited*). Seriously, how can you write them so well every time? I can basically here the epic soundtrack in the background (though we both know war is a messy/dirty business as well...).
You know, in his final moments, Philippe starts to act like a true king. It almost makes him a worthy opponent of Seph, I guess. In some way. Finally. Even if only for a moment.
However, I can also see why Seph calls him a coward. After all, he chooses not to fight and simply gives up. In his last moments, he relies on God instead of his own power.
The very act of killing Philippe serves a double purpose for Sephiroth (or even a triple one, if you count getting back at him for what happened at Crecy): he eliminates his competitor, and at the same, gets the revenge he promised Genesis.
- Oh, I actually wrote that, only to see you spell it out right afterwards... ;) Maybe I should read first, and review later next time.
This is yet another moment of triumph for Sephiroth. "The king is dead, long life the king" ;) However, things are not as easy as that. There is still one person standing behind him and the throne: the Pope.
I'm really curious to see how Seph will face that challenge.
Love your description of the Palace here. It seems like another one of those moments that are almost movie-like, written as if a camera was slowly panning over the scenery. And it sets the mood for the upcoming meeting extremely well.
*The cardinal made it sound as if the Pope had a choice*
That's exactly what I thought while reading it...
(Oh, and I'm still excited about the role of the Knights Templar in all of this...)
You know, I just realized how much the Pope's surroundings focus on earthly riches and power, which is sadly ironic if you consider that both the bible and the church preach the exact opposite. (A certain scene from The Name of the Rose comes to mind...) This has been one of huge ironies throghout the history of the church... (right next to "love thy neighbour", as apparently 'love' sometimes means 'kill', 'torture' or 'humiliate').
Sephiroth once again expresses profound knowledge of history, as well as flawless argumentantion. I really love the way you write him, and how the Pope stands no chance in this verbal confrontation (all he can really do is throw in empty phrases, which might impress the crowd, but not Seph).
It's also nice to see the cardinals so emotional and upset towards the end of the scene. Isn't temparance one of the seven virtues? ;)
I actually expected the Pope to turn him down. I mean, his power is based on the existing system, so he will of course do nothing to change it. Unless he was realy forced to do so.
*"You will not dare!" - "Try me."*
That is so very much Sephiroth yet again.
Oh wow, what an unexpected ending O_O.
True, you already mentioned that you came across facts that will grant Seph an ally amongst the 'servants' of the Pope, but this was still brilliant.
*those I serve*
I'm already dying to find out who 'those' are...
If Sephiroth chooses to trust him and even reveals his true intentions, I can only hope he (and 'those') are worthy of it.
What a genius cliffhanger. I'm looking very much forward to the next chapter... Are you writing already? (*huge kitty eyes*)
Another wonderful chapter, profound, well researched and amazingly written.