|Reviews for Rewind|
| Storyus Raccoonus chapter 1 . 2/21
Sorry but if this doesn't follow an existing work it shouldn't be on .
| EpitomeOfCool chapter 1 . 2/21/2011
Brilliant phrasing and your descriptions create clear images in the mind of the reader. Only suggestion I would make is perhaps you're trying to use too many devices with the repetition of 'the agony' and 'precision', as it perhaps detracts from the main plot, although I can see what you're trying to achieve by doing so. It's a great piece of writing.
| shadowsskate chapter 1 . 3/4/2010
| ThomasMoore chapter 1 . 1/7/2010
ur good, but those annoying words will make the reader bored.
also, work on plot devlopment.
u'd be good in the future, and'll have a lot of fans, just not me. ;)