Reviews for Training Tails
Werdna213 chapter 31 . 3/6
great story can't wait for the sequel
I Hate Snatch Steal chapter 2 . 2/26
When I read your into about making Tails a better fighter, I couldn't agree more. I love this chapter! I just wish you'd finished the squeals and after that gave Tails a chance to demonstrate his new skills in action against Robotnick.
Agent 0076-Kid Son Goku chapter 2 . 1/15
I read all of Tails' lines in the same voices that Thom Pinto & Hal Rayle used to voice Raphael in the 1987 TMNT series.
Guest chapter 2 . 10/5/2014
So far the story is good but the problem is that Tails has two tails not 3
Reaver216 chapter 31 . 9/3/2014
Love this story please post the sequel soon I didn't like you hurting tails that way but I can understand why you did it
Guest chapter 1 . 8/15/2014
Dude I've been waiting for the next story for so long now I'm begging you please post them
Reaver216 chapter 1 . 8/10/2014
Dude I loved this story and I'm getting quite fed up with waiting for Traveller Tails and lylat tails ever since You completed this one and the ONLY problem I have with it was You pulled off his tails You do not do that to a kitsune its taboo and as sonic use to say (I'm wàaaaiiiiittting ) for those others but I'm still miffed You hurt Tails that way
Guest chapter 31 . 7/22/2014
Dude where is the sequel also Why did he come back with three tails is he like a hundred years older also WHY DID YOU HAVE TIEN RIP HIS TAILS OFF THAT IS JUST SOMTHING YOU DON'T DO TO A CUDELLY KITSUNE LIKE TAILS
Guest chapter 31 . 7/22/2014
Why did he come back with three tails is he like a hundred years older also WHY DID YOU HAVE TIEN RIP HIS TAILS OFF THAT IS JUST SOMTHING YOU DON'T DO TO A CUDELLY KITSUNE LIKE TAILS
Guest chapter 31 . 7/22/2014
Dude where's the sequle also my only poblem with the story is that YOU HAD TIEN RIP HIS TAILS OFF why oh why did u do that to poor tails also what is up whith him returning with three tail was it like a hundred years after he was sent away well for him anyway
zlochnyvrr chapter 31 . 3/9/2014
this is a really good story
i hope you write traveler tails and put on fanfiction soon
Guest chapter 1 . 2/15/2014
When are you going to put traveller tails or lylat tails I've been waiting for them
Guest chapter 31 . 1/19/2014
In my option you got a good story. I hope to read the next one soon. Russell Shuey
johnsmmall chapter 9 . 10/28/2013
This is such a badass story! thanks for writing it. I love how you really developed tails into such an awesome fighter and as a person.
Phaenur chapter 1 . 9/23/2013
Well, this is a fun journey. I'm not really familiar with the DBZ cast, but I definitely know Sonic (and Star Fox, but you aren't quite there yet). For that matter, by the time I finished my first read-through (which actually only ended at Spy Tails back in February or so; I have to go through and finish it again now) I was fairly confident I understood the characters and framework of DBZ too, and that's something that very few fics can do well.

That's hardly the only thing you did well, of course. There's a sense of sheer joy in this story that I haven't seen matched anywhere else. There're witty lines, silly situations, alliteration on every line...even though there are mechanical issues, it feels like you had so much *fun* writing this thing that we get pulled right along. You obviously know and love your fandoms, too, since the SatAM cast was perfectly in-character right down to the stupid catchphrases and silly accents (note: I love them for both of those). I know you quoted them for a couple of those, but I could hear their actors even on the original lines. That's also why I feel like I've been educated in DBZ; you're so confident in the fandom I do know that I assume you know what you're talking about in the one I don't. I can only wait to see how well Lylat Tails turns out (speaking of which, the fact that you came up with a different "Tails" title for every chapter is nothing short of amazing, especially to someone who just leaves them as numbers and goes along).

Mechanically, though, there are some errors. There's something interesting about them, though, and that's that they rarely distract or detract from the story. I'm not entirely certain why that works, but I could enjoy the work with no problems despite cataloging errors in the back of my head. Things to look for - you've got some odd comma placement that alternates between excessive ("Aunt Sally, Bunny, Rotor and of course his big brother[,] Sonic[,] were always going out, facing down Robotnik and his robotic goons, risking themselves to protect everyone.") and insufficient ("I was just saying[,] doctor, how your brilliance overwhelms me like a typhoon!"). You've also got an excessive amount of ellipses, to the point where their effectiveness is neutered (I've given the same advice to Pyre-Vulpimorph about his exclamation points and interrobangs, and I've been called out for the same thing in the past myself). Rather than eliminating these, though, you might try for a little variety. See where you can use semicolons and em-dashes to break up the flow. It leads to a different mental voice and underscores things in a new way, which can sometimes disrupt the flow of a story but normally makes it easier and more interesting to read.

Mechanics are about it for my concerns with this story. I mean, of course there are places (like the training montage) where I'd have written it differently, but I'm not *writing* it and it's not even close to a problem (speaking of training sequences, I wonder how Pyre's going to handle Tails's Jedi training when he finally gets there). But as for your storytelling, it's fast-paced, fun, and interesting, with strong and distinct characters that get to evolve beyond where they started without losing sight of who they were and are, and that's something all too few authors on this site can manage. I'll definitely be following along as you keep the story going, and I've got a reread scheduled for sometime soon.
168 | Page 1 2 3 4 11 .. Last Next »