Reviews for The Snake and the Slut
Ravenous Lust chapter 2 . 9/13/2009
Aw Fee, you managed to fit some yaoi in! I lurve you and your normal adversion to writing it! It's great so far, and I'm waiting for the chapters to come! ~Lust
Thorn In Your Side chapter 2 . 9/11/2009
first thing I noticed was that you're capslocking words for emphasis. Loyalty to the cult is all very well and nice, but Feecakes, maybe italicizing would be cooler?

new and improved sound village.

\Newly improved/ you mean. If its new there was nothing before it to improve, and if its improved then it had an older version, thus rendering it not-new. :D

She wanted to get to her Snakey-kun


Orochimaru knew perfectly well that Sasmi was manipulating him. He just didn’t see any danger in it. But this was his dream. He would crush Konoha, and slay that fool the third.

That was my favorite part; I love the way you write their relationship. And three years skippy thingy was good too, I can see Oro changing in that time span to this extent, especially with Sasmi working her magic
Ravenous Lust chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
Yeah, yeah, curse us because we're awesome.

BUT YOU MUST LEARN TO WRITE YAOI. It's actually easier than writing het xD
VoldieandtheDeathMunchers chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
Thorn In Your Side chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
Weirdest assassination attempt ever. And… was that a Konoha headband, on his forehead?

Of course. Only they cared THAT much, to actually keep trying.


I mostly love how your writing gets even better every time I read it. :3 And if anyone ever gives you a hard time (lol) with the smut in R&R, shove this lemon in their face and they'll shut up. I swear, its so good.

“You’ll make it.” he said. “I will it to be so, and so it shall be.”

Absolutely godlike, absolutely Orochimaru. I'm reading this as I watch The Man in the Iron Mask, so that line was just went with the flow. :D