Reviews for Detention
TOkun92 chapter 1 . 9/10/2013
Poor librarian. Well written; I didn't spot any mistakes, grammar or otherwise.
Crimson77 chapter 1 . 9/3/2009
Hi! I read your story on Yuletide and I'm so glad you decided to upload it here too. You are a very talented author and your portrayal of Nagi is stunning. He's one of the characters more interesting in Mai Hime, yet it seldom appears a good fic about him. You made a very good work!
Anonymous chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
I noticed that you tend to use a lot of commas and parentheses, making those particular sentences long-winded. You may want to consider breaking the sentence into two.

Aside from that, it was refreshing to see a fanfic focusing on Nagi. The only way he was out of character was that he didn't immediately flee, but he got back to his roots at the end. A very funny read. Wouldn't mind seeing more from you.

Dragontiger96 chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
It was quite a funny piece. You captured Nagi very well. It's refreshing to see Nagi as someone aside from the overbearing, purely evil, complete bastard mastermind.
The New Mae chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
roflmao. That was great. Refreshing topic too. :3
angelronin chapter 1 . 9/2/2009
Poor Nagi have endue detention and Takumi asking him being Puck for the school play. You did well your first time of writing a fan fiction.