|Reviews for Four Man Squads|
| Hirutenko chapter 19 . 2/28/2010
4 1/2 badass stars out of 5 can wait for more added to my fav stories! Hoorah
| BlueDemonX chapter 3 . 2/20/2010
End seemed a little rushed (Narutos talk with Inari for example...). You could have described Obitos fight a little more though, so we have a better idea of his skill...
About the affinities : Too much wind. Wind was supposed to be rare in Konoha (I suppose somebody already made this observation xD)
And the thing with the second affinity was you own idea I suppose, since it isnt canon (as far as I remember )
Good story as far as I read, hope youll update soon :)
| KonIsMyName chapter 5 . 2/18/2010
Good luck with the rest of your story I no longer have any desire to read further. Nerfed loudmouthed idiotfied Naruto which you have him relying soley on Kyuubi. Your interpretation of Kyuubi's power when in use is weak and boring.
Your obvious favoritism of Sasuke, which I honestly can't stand.
Once again from my earlier review; you stick to canon which it would help your story by leaps to avoid it. Blah Sasuke get's curse mark blah blah. Boring and overdone so many times that it's sick to read again. I don't see how you can advertise a story with a new idea i.e four man squad, but basically mask it with nothing but canon material. You've had so many chances to set your story apart from the other mundane stories. Maybe your lack of imagination is the cause. Once again good luck with the rest of the story. You'll need it as you should have triple the reviews that you have at the moment. Should be scratching your head as to why that is.
| KonIsMyName chapter 3 . 2/18/2010
So far an ok story. My only problem that's keeping my full attention on your story is you drift away from canon at times and you drift to canon when you should drift away...
Naruto freezing when the Demon Brothers showed up is worked to death and having Naruto nerfed in that moment is old and overused in my opinion...
Obito taking care of his wound when you should have kept that Naruto took care of the wound himself by stabbing into his hand...
Keeping Haku alive and bringing him back to Konoha. Just feels to Sesame Street to me. I'm sure he's going to join the gang and all be merry and happy, ugh...
Also this sounded eh, not so good...
“Let’s get wild.” Naruto said as he wiped some blood from his mouth.
Sounds much better...
“Let’s go wild.” Naruto said as he wiped some blood from his mouth.
Lastly the Naruto bashing is probably going to stop me from continuing on with your story. Whether it be from Sasgay or more so the main one Sakura, with her constantly beating the shit out Naruto. That plot device has been kicked so many time that I doubt there's a horse left to kick...
You've done an ok job adding your own flare, but sadly the ones you are keeping have been done enough that I have no interest in reading. I'll be fair and give it a chapter or two before I ditch the story...
| DarkPoet89 chapter 19 . 2/10/2010
I think it woulda been better if you paired off Gaara's team against Neji's, and Sasuke's team against Haku's, I smelled rematches miles away
| Mordread chapter 19 . 2/10/2010
haha its always funny to see Naruto using Kaiten xD the hyuuga elders mustve pissed themselves. was kinda disappointed that NaruHina got the free bye since their match wouldve been more exciting comepared to HakuInos pair up match. hakuIno wouldve lost even if they did get the free bye. anyway u got any plans for naruto learning sage mode? most interesting so far glad to see a change from naruto not goin on a 3 yr trip like most fics tend to do.
| Green-Chrystall chapter 19 . 2/7/2010
Great story! XD after some weeks I finished reading all chapter! And I though you the battle scene were great! Gaara is unbeatable huh? I have a feeling that Gaara's next battle will end as fast as this one -_-;
update soon :D
| Illidan the Half Demon chapter 19 . 1/26/2010
It's taken me a few weeks to catch up to this point, and I must say, this story has been the best one I've seen in quite a while. I love how you put the groups into teams of 4, plus they all seem to work so well together. I've also enjoyed seeing Naruto and Hinata together and building on one another's strengths. Also, great choice in having Sasuke choose to return to the village rather than join snakey. The second set of Chunin Exams has been excellent as well, and I really like how you put the finals as a two on two match ups. Lol, the only match that wasn't too shocking or long was Gaara and Shiroi's. At any rate, I look forward to seeing updates and continuing to read this story. Again, excellent job thus far!
| dracon867 chapter 19 . 1/22/2010
| jediguru chapter 19 . 1/19/2010
wow! i hope you update soon1 i haven't enjoyed a naruto fanfic so much since i read "Closer" by Lynns. keep up the good work! dattebayo!
| Akalon chapter 19 . 1/18/2010
Great story, quite good. I'm hoping that your not gonna have Ino be stupid enough to use the MTJ on Gaara, because oi damn that'd suck. Looking forward to next chapter.
| oxGhostSlayerxo chapter 19 . 1/16/2010
really like where this story is goin, loved this chapter with gaara smashing sai... i just don't like him. anyway keep it up.
| Hatake Tsughi chapter 19 . 1/13/2010
Awesome writing for the matches not too long or too short great job! Please do better by Ino than Kishmoto. Even though Ino and Haku can’t beat Gaara, I want her to really get to fight for once.
**we interrupt this review for Kishmoto Rant!** Kishmoto has weakened Ino and Hinata to make Sakura the strongest kunoichi, since she is the lead girl in the series. But I don’t think he had to do that. Hinata could cut off all of Sakura chakra then what could she do, Hinata fought Neji freaken Neji in the chuunin exam. **sorry rant coming to a close**
As a little girl Ino was a badass/ tough girl, even in the chuunin exams she was tough(and should have won that prelim match). Yes she can be frivolous and girl but I think is strong and you should make her strong, she should train with Haku on taijutus and her dad should come to help strength her Yamanaka mind destruction and control skills. Nobody puts Ino in the corner XD
| Dr. Nova chapter 2 . 1/11/2010
I'm only two chapters in but already I have to comment on something that's been irking me with recent fics - hating on quirks. I understand this is your fic but I keep running across these stories where Naruto ditches the Orange Jumpsuit he loves so much and tries to have a normal diet in an attempt to justify over-powering his character. In this case the decision is at least forced upon him, but I honestly believe that writers that systematically remove the quirks of the character take away some of the reasons fans like the character in the first place. Wardrobe and diet are normally minor aspects of a character, but in Naruto they are defining quirks to his role. He is the shining example of a Shonen Manga lead: lovable idiot who lives his ideals. You start taking away the quirks and flaws to give him skill he just becomes a blond Sasuke who smiles more. This is more than likely a critique too late to matter, but I can see myself reading more stories from you. And I do think I'll catch up on this story to see where it goes. In the future though, please, don't hate on the orange. It's just gotten to be annoying as to how adverse people are to it. It's not "proper" ninja attire, but Naruto doesn't seem meant to every be a "proper" ninja.
| lord Martiya chapter 19 . 1/9/2010
It's quite interesting. I'll read more of it. By the way, I want to give you a little trivia: if you search Manda on Wikipedia, you'll find a character with the same name of the Snake Lord, it may give you inspiration for future summons.