Reviews for Out of Control
hhhh chapter 1 . 1/21
its okay. feels rushed.
hhhh chapter 1 . 11/16/2013
it is okay. i bit too abrupt.
twifan chapter 1 . 5/6/2010
it was a nice lemon.:D good job
DarlingCuppa chapter 1 . 10/19/2009
Hey! Its me! Nice love story. I loved it write more please.

~Bellatrix Todd~
smellcolor chapter 1 . 9/5/2009
Not a terrible story. But you really need to work on your wording... you switch between first and third person a lot, sometimes even in the same sentence.

And while I think lemons are always a good thing, this could use a little more plot... without at least some plot this story falls a little flat.