Reviews for Their First and Only: A Hyuga Tale
person92 chapter 1 . 6/29/2014
You have the whole story in one big chapter?
Origina i guess. Kudos
Jaded Baby Blues chapter 1 . 4/3/2014
Your writing is superb! This should get way more reviews than what it has right now! I love your story, it is very touching, sad and romantic. I have a weakness for arranged marriages and an even BIGGER one for Hyuugacest. I am in love with Hinata and Neji as a pair. They are so cute together. I had felt that way ever since I saw them fight during the chuunin exams. You made such a lovely story with such a beautiful, well written love scene that I literally felt envious of your writing prowess! I heart this story big time! Thank you for writing it! You should write more Neji/Hina fics!
aurora0914 chapter 1 . 2/21/2014
i swear that this would have a LOT more reviews if you had posted it as a multi chaptered fic instead of an insanely long one shot. While there are a couple of loose ends (what happened to Sasuke?), overall, it was a breath taking fic and Im glad to have found it. I loved it. I spotted a couple of errors, but nothingxmajor abd I hope one day you repost it as a muli chaptered fic!
hopelessromantic5ever chapter 1 . 6/5/2013
very nice, the fight scenes were obviously very well planned and thought out, loved how the ending made a full circle with the beginning.
racquelli motzerelli chapter 1 . 4/30/2013
Whew! I needed a dictionary for this one haha! That was probably the classiest sex scene I have ever read, and I've read LOTS of them!

Such a great story and i love the way you portrayed Neji and Hinata! You stayed true to their attitude and mannerisms. This is my fave NH story yet! Good job!
Michiko Burel chapter 1 . 4/16/2013
It was so worth reading. Thank you. I liked it!
Abiding Angel chapter 1 . 12/12/2010
I really loved this fic! 3 I was most impressed on Hinata's character development. She definitely deserved attention not only because she's sweet and cute, but because she is totally capable of developing her abilities in the way that you portrayed it. I think she would kick ass in the Jonin exams, especially with Neji's help. ;) It was sweet, emotional and adventurous - a winning combination in my opinion. I look forward to reading more of your works, keep up the great work!
Lydia-kitten chapter 1 . 10/21/2010
Excellent story. I could into details about the characterisation and the lovely plot ideas, but I should rather be updating my own fics instead.

It was nice of you to offer some insights into Japanese culture too, without falling into the trap of putting 'desu' everywhere.
FallingSnowDream chapter 1 . 10/10/2010
there's really no way to describe this. Not even the word perfect is good enough for this!
SakuraLee91 chapter 1 . 7/28/2010
Omg! That was absolutely awesome! It had me hooked. I loved the plot and your attention to details. Not to mention the characters were wonderful! Love love love it!
Adaala chapter 1 . 7/18/2010
I'm a sucker for Hyuuga fics, I loved your story. Learnt some Japanese along the road...
Dark Magician Girl Forever chapter 1 . 7/6/2010
Should i kill the ramen-maniac? DO IT!
totallove435 chapter 1 . 6/30/2010
God! This story was so amazing to read! :D It really did keep me on the edge of my seat, wondering what was going to happen between Neji and Hinata. I was giggling like a school girl when Neji was acting like a little child. (Which I still can't imagine haha XD) I really do admire your way with words and the knowledge within it. Please never stop writing! _
Mangajuicexd chapter 1 . 5/9/2010
wow... very long story! haha it kept me from sleeping because I was so engrossed over it...

Even though I was sleepy, my mind told me to finish it because it was so good! hope there's a sequel... and one more thing... I hope you broke your story in their perspective chapters... but anyways, I admire your writing skills and the emotions are very good. You really wrote them.
Neji's Secret Stalker chapter 1 . 3/14/2010
Wow, you really are quite good at writing. I was very impressed by how the story captures the reader. You should very proud of your work. However, If i may make a suggestion though, mext time space out the chapters in the chapter section next time.

beta reader: neji's secret stalker
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